Why doth thou speak righteously
when thy blood runs red;
hasten... 'tis blue nay?
'Tis thy velvet Moors skin
I hath; two heads not.
Wishing triumphs afar; to late
to reveal who thou really are.
Atonement; forgive me m'lord
Romi ye barbarian went to far.
Upon thy pedestal...
off with thine head!
I offer m'demented life;
masquerading his barren heart.
Storming into thy dynasty
which Romi hast no part.
Unto thy holy light
darkness shall fail anon.
Author notes
Quote: one can remain dark even if he is in the light until...Unknown
(YES! until someone speaks out against them)
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A contest entry
- until... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended July 14, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Wow.
Excellent. Congratulations on your shiny trophy. I love the dialect used in this. Very very effective. ~Pamela
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Your approach is very wast to bring the depth to the prompt in a wholistic way..you touched me this way..my friend..thanks...
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Definately this is a wonderful entry.
I loved the way you protrayed the English language form. Very creative and brought more Life to your piece. The imagery is wonderful as well.
Wishing you all the best and good luck.
Goddaughter Ephiphany
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I love the Olde Engishe language. Good imagry of the Velvet Moor's skin.
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Wonderful writing here. I like the atmosphere created in this piece. I also like the way it is writtena and the language used too.
Gives it a sort of Shakespearean feel to it. Superb imagery here also. Yes, one can remain in the dark, even though they be in the light. Sometimes the light is not strong enough to hold back the darkness. Good luck in the contest, Novy. x
Fantastic writing Novy.
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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