This Darkness buried in him
It's unlike Anything You've seen
It feeds and consumes him
From the inside out
It's become so powerful
So destructive
Even with the Greatest Light
Attempting to contribute in his meaningless life
It becomes dulled out
By the ever-growing Darkness
He encounters Excessive Happiness
He feels joy
He feels perfection
Yet the Darkness floods it all away
Until He returns to nothing
To remain a shell
To be ruled by the Darkness in him
Forevermore
Author notes
this wasn't a long time ago. just several months ago. im 15 so i hope it counts..
A contest entry
- until... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended July 14, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Good Old Poem, from younger years by Violinstrings.
650 points, ended November 15, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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yes it is great
i think it is about jesus
or someone in a coma
depression
good free verse
do not get into the habit of ryhming every line
like me
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Only 15 and you write about such darkness like one much older, it's a good poem as I see, the battle between dark and light. Good job in writing this.
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I can see the strugle between the light and the darkness bringing the truth of this universal nature..well done...
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