Paradise blossoms
beneath your tender touch
and devotion delights
beyond dreamt horizons
Heart sighs...
... as eternity waits
within your eyes
Author notes
Prompt: Quote, 20 words
Heaven is found in knowing your love for me,
But the experience of it is beyond even that.
In a list
A contest entry
- One of those quickie contests you may have heard about 10-20-30 by Cerulean.
475 points, ended July 4, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh my! Deep, passionate and sincere! Keep this up and I may fall in love with you.
Love,
Amera♥
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Aww
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as eternity waits within your eyes....what a flippin cool line!! i wish i thought of that!
that was totally awesome! deserved that gold congrats hun
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this is really beautiful, Jackie....congrats on the gold, well deserved
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Awww... Such a truly lovely piece of beuty in thought here. Gentle, and utterly poignant. Very well penned in so few words!
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*sigh* so beautiful..each line is excellent..So congrats on the gold!
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How sweeeeet Jacks! Well done on the GOLD!! Well deserved.
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A beautiful and re-freshing feel with this on! I really like your lines "... as eternity waits within your eyes" So romantic! Congratulations on the Gold hun! Well deserved!
♥
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I like the way you spread your sighs.
Softly and gently you paint dreams in our hearts and a sigh in our voice.
Great gold.
Buddy
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great i loved iut alot. Very good for a short poem
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Just beautiful. A joy to read. Congratulations on the well deserved gold hun
Gaylene
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Wonderful take on the prompt. This is such an amazing and heartfelt piece. Congrats on the gold too.
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Congrats on the gold My Sweet Kiwi Queen ..
Sigh-able material indeed ... yes.
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this is such a beautiful write and is stunning with heart capturing words to bring and add more depth to the prompt. another amazing write auntie
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bella mia cugino like you
congrats on the gold
Tasha
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Good on you Jacks! This is a stunning peice my dear and well worth gold!
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Beautifully written and definitely worthy of the gold! Congratulations kiwi!
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wow, beautiful. well deserved of the gold. congrats!
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Beautiful
Beautiful write my dear friend. Well deserved Gold
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Congratulations on the gold.
Twenty amazing words, imagery superb...now lost for words
Well done...Sue
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excellent!
very sweet write! congrats on the gold lady!
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Congrats on the gold!!
Oh wowzer, gorgeous piece! The imagery is stunning, and the closing lines...*sigh* Beautifully put hun, so deserving of the gold
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Excellent Gold trophy (and deserved)
The first line, "Paradise blossoms" has so much imagery...I suspect you're using 'blossoms' as a verb...but it also sounds like you could be talking about an imaginary kind of flower.
The whole thing is just..awesome. It's got soft imagery, but strong words.
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Wow, simply beautiful!
Congratulations on your Gold trophy
in this contest. A well deserved
piece you have written here. Keep
it up!
Jeremy0826
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So pretty hun and something to sigh over lol although I do that alot these days. Congrats on your gold, well deserved. Love, C
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Congratulations on yet another gold! Wonderful work.
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Fantastic!
Congrats on the Gold Jacks!! A beautiful thought that fills the heart with romance. Don
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Beautiful use of words. Congratulations on the Gold!!
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Thanks for another drink! *hiccups again*
I'm about to go get one very soon too! Yayy
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Thanks hun! Haven't won gold in an age to shocked and delighted!
Congrats on your silver
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Beautiful
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so sensual and soft, breathlessly beautiful.
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Always you write a complete idea....even with 20words. Very well done. "beyond dreamt horizons" has a lot of meaning in so few words.
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Stunning, just as one would expect from you! Best of luck my friend. Glad you made it! yay
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Beautiful!
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