It is only {an imitation of emotion}
when you tell me you care.
For, if those words were true
would you really be there?
In her arms; her in yours
nauseating as ipecac to me.
{Through vision blurred} with tears
I beg of you to set me free.
Once again you tell me
she means to you not a thing
Yet, every day of my life
it's only pain that you bring.
I keep holding on to you
hoping your heart might see,
she has nothing to offer you
like the love you have in me.
Author notes
No true at all. My Luis is wonderful but this is as close to dark as I can do
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Oh I have been here! My ex was a serial cheater... and when I finally found the strength to leave, he realised just what he had lost... but too late!
Excellent poem that really describes these emotions.. very well done considering it's not your own experience!!
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I was affected!
That was me at one time,"nauseating as ipecac to me".
Great words, great imagination!
Regards,
Jennifer -
I was affected!
That was me at one time,"nauseating as ipecac to me".
Great words, great imagination!
Regards,
Jennifer
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For not being true
It felt so real,I was even getting mad at how men can be with some one they say they love. I enjoyed it but it did spark a little hate for the man that was hurting you. I was feeling your pain. Keep writing LISA
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For something not true, feelings of hopeless love and betrayal are so well captured here. Good write
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I'd hate to see it true!
Best of luck to Luis and you!
And a bouquet of yellow roses
to you, as well! -Jen
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Wonderful. The flow is smooth, I appreciate the { } around the given phrases, and for something that is "not true" to you, you really captured the emotion.
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So sad I hope it's only a write. Very well written.
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