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Their Sun

They ignored what they saw.
She wasted away...
A failing flame,
Til she sputtered out.
Now they realize,
As they lower her down,
She was the sun
Illuminating their world

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  • Hope Angel silver member
    July 6, 2008
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    oh wow...this is stunning. It's beautful yet so sad. You blew me away. Thanks for entering.


  • ErisLeFae
    July 5, 2008

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    wow. well done. I could almost picture it or see it. like the cliche "you dont know what you got till it's gone!


  • Shifting
    July 5, 2008
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    oh wow. Short but oh so sweet, honey flavoured and tantilizing. Lovely.