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The Siren of a Star

Come to me.
Reach for me.
Grasp me and hold me.
The siren of a star.

I see it hanging in the sky,
Sometimes obscured and sometimes bright,
But all the others fade to nothing.
That one alone is right.

Night has reached its darkest jet.
Little dots shine hazily,
But there is one whose mournful whisper
Beckons just to me.

I look away to painful light,
Yet still it tickles in my ear,
An eerie, haunting wailing,
That I only can hear.

My blood pounds madly through my veins.
I can’t stay still or turn away.
All fades into a nameless longing,
I've neither wish nor strength to stay.

For it promises my dreams,
It says that if my will is strong,
That it will let me change the world,
The power, mine, for right or wrong.

It hints at all my nameless fears,
That I’ve no worth or I am weak,
But still I hear it’s endless calling,
And its brightness, I must seek.

The yearning strengthens, grips my heart.
I reach far through the endless sky.
The earth and stars fade from around me.
Grasping it, I find I fly.

The Siren Song is calling on,
To go higher or further still.
It dances on beyond my reach.
Again, I muster up my will.

So still I strive to greater heights.
Each time it takes more will to soar,
And still it calls me ever on.
A beacon light, an unlocked door.

Come to me.
Reach for me.
Grasp me and hold me.
The siren of a star.

Author notes

This poem is entirely metaphorical. Though when I wrote it I had a specific double meanings in mind, it can be interpreted in any way that makes you feel the way that is described. The choice is yours.



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  • owlish
    October 20, 2008

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    "It hints at all my nameless fears,
    That I’ve no worth or I am weak,
    But still I hear it’s endless calling,
    And its brightness, I must seek."

    I would be quoting a heck of a lot more, but that wouldn't have much of a point. I love the three stanzas after this. Very beautiful. Love how you have the same ending as the beginning. And thank you SO MUCH for following the rules! It's a HUGE relief! Best wishes in the contest!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 8, 2008
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    This was very beautifully penned
    with original thoughts.
    Made for a wonderful read!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • hotchocolate gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    Really good I like it!

    I see it hanging in the sky,
    Sometimes obscured and sometimes bright,
    But all the others fade to nothing.
    That one alone is right.

    Good Luck!


  • Childofserenity
    August 20, 2008
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    good poem. youve got skill. thanks for entering.


  • checkmate
    August 15, 2008

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    this is definitely one of the best pieces I have read so far from you. I remember feeling the exact way- I was riding in the car and feeling great (sort of anyway ) and when i looked up there was just one star and it was twinkling and it just felt really special. you might think i am crazy now but well, i was following that little star all the way as teh car went on and when we stopped and i got out and looked up the whole sky was ablaze with stars and stars and it was awesome.

    sorry for going on like that. this is where the real comment begins

    i absolutely loved this piece. the start was great and you carried every feeling throughout to the brilliant ending lines. there is nothing here I would want you to chage; this is absolutely perfect. this gave me such a wonderful feeling...so finally i can hit my books. at least now i have a purpose

    my fave stanza is this:

    For it promises my dreams,
    It says that if my will is strong,
    That it will let me change the world,
    The power, mine, for right or wrong.

    && I admire you for your awesome rhyme. it's wonderfully written. the imagery is stunning. everything here is brilliant

    take care,
    checkmate.


  • drakostheron
    August 9, 2008
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    wow very nice work and great metaphor. excellent job. good luck in the contest

  • piccola silver member
    August 3, 2008
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    "I look away to painful light,
    Yet still it tickles in my ear,
    An eerie, haunting wailing,
    That I only can hear." I love this stanza. It stands out to me moreso than the others. Thank you for sharing and for the entry.


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    August 2, 2008
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    Good luck.

  • wendymolly
    July 27, 2008

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    I loved the entire theme in which you so well lent to this, and for that you are a contest finalist!!!! good luck!!!! take care always!!! ~pithyAplomB.

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