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She fell into step with trouble

She fell into step with trouble
and out of step with life
which ran at her from all directions
and like marbles spilling from a hole a sock
she could never keep an eye on where each one went.
Terry Carroll

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  • Gulfbreeze
    November 21, 2008
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    wow who couldnt relate to this at least once in a persons life. very powerful message in so few words. 4th line .."from a hole a sock" did you intend to add in a sock or from a sock? Neat little piece, made this reader look back for a moment in time. I think I have collected most all of my marbles.

    • Tercarro
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you for noticing

      I did mean a hole in a sock but didn't notice the mistake. I did like this one too because it just came to me and there aren't many that I have written that I truly like.
      How are ya.


  • Miss DontTouchME
    November 9, 2008
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    Well done :)

    I like that it's short and decriptive. Fast-told but still expressive ;P

    • Tercarro
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you ;P, I welcome your comments and I'm grateful that you took the time to write to me.
      Regards
      Terry