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Day Dreaming

After I heard it.
After I saw it.

  

The image in my mind.

 

Blood was gushing out as the door shut behind you.

The knife in your hand as life rush out of your body.

 

A scream

 

A sudden movement and the door flies open.

She sees.

 

The gaze in your eyes,

shows a sign. 

 

The jokes the fun we had disapperd as your life faded,

will it happen for real.

 

You meant to ask for help but put it off to long.

Now its to late, was it your fate, dyeing so young.

 

Life is meant for everyone here but now it's gone...

Goodbye, forever. 

Author notes

This poem is about my friend, Araby, who slits (or cuts) herself, and once I heard about her doing that i had this image.

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  • Candyknife gold member
    July 6, 2008
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    hmm

    thats really sad
    i like the emotion you penned into this write
    well done


  • City-of-Angels
    July 5, 2008

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    Man thats tough. I had a friend who cut, I was always worried about this also. Nice title by the way. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • brokenxxangel
    July 4, 2008
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    a dream about me, carrey? aw... I wouldn't ever commit suicide... I don't think...! You and sunny keep me strong and happy!
    luv ya always!!!
    ~airy~


    • xxFallenDreamsxx
      July 4, 2008

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      not perpously but if you cut a important vain you'd bleed to death

      • brokenxxangel
        July 4, 2008
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        well, ya... but not purposely and like... I don't THINK that'd happen, but... I guess you never know. It's very good... you might be better at writing poetry than you think


        • xxFallenDreamsxx
          July 4, 2008
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          are you saying you thought I'd be bad at poetry?

          • brokenxxangel
            July 4, 2008
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            No... I just thought you thought you weren't good. Or was that sunny...? Oops... sorry, I just thought you didn't think you'd be good. I know I didn't think I'd be good, but... lotsa people say I am, so... yup. Sawey, carrey! Please find it in your heart to forgive me!


            • xxFallenDreamsxx
              November 15
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              Haha, no I think I'm not good... Just bugging you... And you are amazing at writing poetry!

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