bodies,
spooned for sleep,
wear crumpled sheets
he stirs;
her hand slides, careful –
unties the knot of dreams
before the dawn can
bring its weight to bear,
they sweat again
Author notes
Five o'clock in the morning...
A contest entry
- 30 Words by Dalaney.
600 points, ended July 6, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whew! Beautifully sensual. Congrats on the emerald cup.
~Pamela 
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I like the bodies dressed for sleep, the hand unties dream's knot and before the day begins, the embracing. Congratulations on the HM>
Marlene -
...as always, your writing inspires me to dream, to feel...i love this, Peter. Laney
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some images playing on my head... so this must mean this has a lot of imagery. Not only imagery but beautiful ones as well.
much luck in the contest.
Blessed be
Blanche
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Luvit!
"before the dawn can bring its weight to bear"
This is wonderful.
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