It all seemed so innocent, the night we met.
Just one of those things we'd both soon forget.
But, I wasn't thinking, for if I had been,
I'd have thought of the space I could be left in.
We met each day down at middle town park.
We'd snuggle and cuddle, for hours till dark.
Each afternoon, all I could think of was him.
Such disaster was spawned and all on a whim.
Now, he's gone, I keep hearin' myself say it.
Like a movie that's ended and I can't replay it.
Though I'm dying inside, I refuse to display it.
No, we ran a bill up, but, now I have to pay it.
One day, it was over, he said he'd have to run,
My whole world shattered 'cos I knew it was done.
He wasn't, at all, what he led me to see,
he belonged to another and he only used me.
I was only a doll he could wind up each day,
but now he was bored and he tossed me away.
we both knew the odds, but we played anyhow,
he's back with the other, how do I live now?
Yes, he's gone, I keep tellin' myself, so what.
He wasn't that much, though I gave him a lot.
I'm hurtin' for certain, oh, it's gettin' so old,
I was playin' with fire, now I'm out in the cold.
Yea, playin' with fire, now I'm out in the cold.
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ed, your talent is showing vividly here..Wow..you have taken on a poem in the female gender way of thinking, and you have done an excellent job..The rhyming, flow,and lyrics could be for a song! Magnificent, Bravo!
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WONDERFUL POEM
Oh I love everything about this. What an amazing write. The rhyme is perfect and the flow is great. And the story your words speak of were so true for so many. When we play with fire we do get burnt. This was a pleasure to read this morning. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
You Have A Wonderful Day!!!!!!!!
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used and thrown away...you have filled this piece with some very deep emotions...from beginning to end it flows like a song, a love song with a soft bass beat...a real tear jerker thank you kindly for sharing
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Oh wow I love these lines:
Like a movie that's ended and I can't replay it.
Though I'm dying inside, I refuse to display it.
No, we ran a bill up, but, now I have to pay it.
I could really feel your words in this and the emotion just jumped out at me. I love how you have worded this, it is very original in its self.
This is a brilliant piece
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Brilliant Writer of Deep Throughts
Well you sure know how to look into a picture and see the hidden soul of a woman. This is an excellent write, read. The whole concept rocks....I loved it because your imagery is dynamic. You saw throught the eyes and soul of a woman scorned....A Masterful Piece of Art!......................ennovy
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I loved the rhyme; magnificently done!
I really liked this poem, it kept me interested right till the end. It was excellent!
Nice One!
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Excellent Ed!
Cold? I think this poem was hot with great rhymes! You didn't let me down this time Ed! GOOD WORK AGAIN!
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Excellent piece. I felt the emotion in this. You did well at the personification of this [picture and the flow and rhyme is excellent!
Thanks for sharing
gaylene
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20 words???
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