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On a Friday

when I think of you
the scent of pineapple is in the air
this hint of nostalgia
makes me sigh

because you are the anachronism
that makes the past come up again
although I don't want to remember

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for the contest "The Missing": I hope this counts

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  • slick99
    August 19

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    cool poem

    this is a cool poem!!!! congratulations on the silver!!! have a nice day, -slick99
  • ian sawicki silver member
    August 8
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    maybe a pineapple biscuit poem then is in order


  • funkyricky
    August 5

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    well done

    Yes we smell a food or a perfume and it all comes back
    people we lost or times we cant have back. Some times they make us happy sometimes sad.good luck in the contest

  • Piccola gold member
    August 4

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    congratuations on the silver! isn't it odd how our senses affect us? bringing up memories, etc. Nice job on this and thank you for the time you took to enter.

  • ea silver member
    July 30

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    well done on the silver! Weird how a smell can have that effect, or a song, etc, in the reverse situation, too, so very poignantly.

  • Sorry, I needed to laugh at that one...

    It is sad, kind of. But someone it makes me giggle. Is Friday an... Anspielung auf du-weisst-schon-wen?
    That's why it was kind of funny, insider you know. The topic isn't funny at all, not even the insider, but you know it sometimes feels better to laugh at the sad things. "Always look on the bright si-hight of life, dedubdedubdedubdedub" Sorry
    Keep on writing, coz I'm keeping on!
    Jo


    • LittleAnn
      July 28
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      Yep. exactly.
      btw, Anspielung = allusion (thank you, LEO )
      I showed it to Ulli on the day of the "China Project Presentation", and she was all like, "Huh??! What you talking 'bout??"
  • short sweet and to the point very good poem

  • Elvis
    July 6

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    anachronism... now there's a mouthful. Congratulations to you!!!!!


  • Maxboy gold member
    July 5

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    Why is it, the things we want to forget we can't and the ones we want to remember are sometimes so hard?
    Good luck in the contest!


  • Keith
    July 5

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    I think this is good. And I haven't seen the word anachronism for a while, though I might describe myself as anachronistic. Or should that be iconoclastic? Oops, just increased the adjective count!

    Nice poem.
  • Very well written and so clever. You created such amazing imagery without one adjective!
    All the very best with this
    gaylene


  • Melodies silver member
    July 4

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    Cleverly written, nicely penned, and smartly thought-out, fine young poet person. Good going, all 'round!

  • This is just along the lines of what I'm looking for. I only but Brautigan's name out there in case someone was stuck and couldn't figure out how to write without adjectives. lol. Loved the last line of this. You capture a mood that is subtle but still incredibly moving. Thanks for entering.
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