when I think of you
the scent of pineapple is in the air
this hint of nostalgia
makes me sigh
because you are the anachronism
that makes the past come up again
although I don't want to remember
Author notes
for the contest "The Missing": I hope this counts 
A contest entry
- Try this... or not by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 6, 12 entries
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cool poem
this is a cool poem!!!! congratulations on the silver!!! have a nice day, -slick99 -
maybe a pineapple biscuit poem then is in order
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well done
Yes we smell a food or a perfume and it all comes back
people we lost or times we cant have back. Some times they make us happy sometimes sad.good luck in the contest -
congratuations on the silver! isn't it odd how our senses affect us? bringing up memories, etc. Nice job on this and thank you for the time you took to enter.
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well done on the silver! Weird how a smell can have that effect, or a song, etc, in the reverse situation, too, so very poignantly.
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Sorry, I needed to laugh at that one...
It is sad, kind of. But someone it makes me giggle. Is Friday an... Anspielung auf du-weisst-schon-wen?
That's why it was kind of funny, insider you know. The topic isn't funny at all, not even the insider, but you know it sometimes feels better to laugh at the sad things. "Always look on the bright si-hight of life, dedubdedubdedubdedub" Sorry
Keep on writing, coz I'm keeping on!
Jo
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Yep. exactly.
btw, Anspielung = allusion (thank you, LEO
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I showed it to Ulli on the day of the "China Project Presentation", and she was all like, "Huh??! What you talking 'bout??"
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short sweet and to the point very good poem
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anachronism... now there's a mouthful. Congratulations to you!!!!!
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Why is it, the things we want to forget we can't and the ones we want to remember are sometimes so hard?
Good luck in the contest!
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I think this is good. And I haven't seen the word anachronism for a while, though I might describe myself as anachronistic. Or should that be iconoclastic? Oops, just increased the adjective count!
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Very well written and so clever. You created such amazing imagery without one adjective!
All the very best with this
gaylene
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Cleverly written, nicely penned, and smartly thought-out, fine young poet person. Good going, all 'round!
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This is just along the lines of what I'm looking for. I only but Brautigan's name out there in case someone was stuck and couldn't figure out how to write without adjectives. lol. Loved the last line of this. You capture a mood that is subtle but still incredibly moving. Thanks for entering.
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