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Light Haiku



light bolting from sky
thunderous roar captures ear
He comes in a flash












Words: K.Botka
7/4/08

Author notes

Mt 24:27 For as the lightning cometh out of the east, and shineth even unto the west; so shall also the coming of The Son of man be.
Lu 17:24 For as the lightning, that lighteneth out of the one part under heaven, shineth unto the other part under heaven; so shall also The Son of man be in His day.

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  • Cynewulf silver member
    July 5

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    I like this. Good imagery. I can hear it & see it. I don't think anything sounds awkward. If you were worried about the omission of the definite article 'the' between the words 'from' & 'sky' in the first line, I don't think it matters. It actually gives it a more exotic sound I think.