I’m falling inside this abyss
Fading into this numb feeling,
Can anybody hear me?
No, I’m here alone
They don’t understand,
No one understands,
So I’ll sit here with this knife
Cutting through the…
…Scars, you come to me with them all over
And tell me it’s the last time
You’ll feel like this.
I can’t tell you how that makes me feel,
Every time the knife slits your skin
You cut a hole in my heart
And I bleed for you
Every time, every time.
But you should know I’m never far
I’ve always been…
…There, you see I can’t live here anymore
With this pain and anguish conquering me
I didn’t want you to see me like this
Broken and bruised
Wishing for this life to be over
You’ve loved me all this time
And I can’t imagine why,
Cause I’m so sick of faking
And making
Them believe that everything’s ok
When I know that it’s all a…
…Big mistake, I will always forgive you my child
Let me wrap you up in my arms
I’m big enough to carry any load you bear
This world may not understand
But I do my child
For I’ve made you,
My beautiful creation,
And I will never let you…
…Go, I must let go
It hurts too much
I’ve cried too many lonely tears
So now I’ll say good-bye,
Open wound and all
I’ll let my crimson tears shed
As I let go, because…
…I can take the pain away
Don’t say good-bye
This is the last night you’ll be alone
Please hold on and look up to the sky
I’m here and always will be
Please don’t say…
…Good-bye…
Author notes
A conversation between God and a girl who wants to commit suicide,
God is always here, and won't ever let you go.
Based off of the song "Last Night" by Skillet
http://youtube.com/watch?v=w4VlMjVomK4
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Wow, this is amazing.
I love how you made the poem into a conversation; that's very creative. I can also really relate to the girl. I feel the way she does right this moment.
This poem gave me chills while I was reading it. This is one of the best writes I've read in awhile.
Great, great job!
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Whoaaa, this is intense & absolutely amazing. Every word was so captivating & honest. I love the point of view you wrote this from. Very creative & brilliantly penned.
-There, you see I can’t live here anymore
With this pain and anguish conquering me
I didn’t want you to see me like this
Broken and bruised
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I definitely know what that feels like. Well phrased, as it is relatable, once again. Keep it up
This was painfully amazing♥
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Painfully Great
Once I started to read I felt the pain within
and as it drew me in with each stanza my heart
went out to the victim happily relieved when He responded to your plight!
He never says Good-Bye -Only Welcome my child !
Very well written.
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this is really good
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Sweetskilletness!
This is so deep and compelling and beautifully sad! I love Skillet WHOOOO!!!!! God is AWESOME.
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WOW!!!
AMAZING WRITE AND CREATIVITY LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE DONE INTHIS WRITE. GREAT JOB!!! -
I really loved this. I actually used to cut when I was younger, and the struggle the girl is going through is all too familiar. I love the style and techniques you used to really put emotion in this piece. great work!
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Gooood night...you gave me goose bumps.Love the lead offs and interjections.Gives this work so much power and authority.It's...it's stunning to say the least!
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i really enjoyed the vibe i got from this piece, your words portrayed the emotion.
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so sad
I used to cut myself later last year and I recently stopped this year. I wished that I could have my mother there with me. I was living with my aunt and uncle, and I couldn't stand being there with them anymore. I don't live with them anymore, thankfully but I'm still waiting ((living in a foster home temp.)) so I can be with my mother again.
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I love that Skillet song.
"This is the last night you'll spend alone,
I'll wrap you in my arms and I won't let go,
I'm everthing you need me to be."
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Wow, niece..This is powerful! Cutting, a battle that goes on with some on AP is not a fake thing it is real...To have the voice of God in this poem, and this loving voice,trying to break through the darkness..This is very real my dear, and a wonderful write that some can identify with...Bravo for the write!
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Wow Michaela!!! This is an awesome piece you have created. The imagery is wonderful and I love the background too.
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