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Song; Lyric If They Know----Not Finished

She lights her cigarette off the stove
Takes a puff and wonders if they know
Takes a shower, puts back on her clothes
And boy, don't her face glow

She feels a guilt trip time and time again
wonders if this thing will ever end
Doesn't think they should continue and
Boy, don't her face glow


What you gonna do when they all know
Time out session to say I told you so
And boy don't her face still seem to glow
She wonders when they'll know



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  • Maxboy gold member
    July 5

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    Sounds like you have a good start on it. I believe the last two lines are reversed though (secound read maybe not). The "Boy, don't her face glow" I liked, with the part about the shower, it reminded me of the saying a lot of us older people use, "Boy, you clean up pretty good", which is a complement. I think when you are finished with it, it will clean up pretty good.
    Good Job