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The Plight Of The Rubic's Cube

so I whispered
to myself the other day
'they value colour no more'
it's time to whiten
me now

but wait,
a bird
has pecked their brains
no longer am I played

no putting to right my colour again....








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Ten lines or less (line breaks not included).
Subject: Any.
Form: Any.
Only no-no: Slapstick humor.

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  • Dienush
    July 4, 2008
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    Wow, so clever.

  • Nicole Hanna
    July 4, 2008

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    Ah, now the excellent entries are pouring in. Loved this one. Using a rubic's cube as a metaphor for personal "color". Loved the last line. No critique... I wouldn't bore you with that. This is wonderful as is. Thanks for entering.


    • Fourthaxis
      July 5, 2008
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      Thank YOU, for letting me try something different! Richard Brautigan's pretty cool too, thanks for the introduction!!