Grannie and I were talking just now about the changes she has seen
in her 99.5 years on the planet.
How for entertainment her mother would sit and tell stories for hours
to her and my aunt, and also the cousins.
Stories that would give them dreams and screams.
She reminded me of some things from my own childhood.
Fears and watching movies that would scare me to tears.
How I would not stop watching.
I told her of my beliefs now and how from the experiences I have
endured, I no longer have many fears.
People scare me more than the unknown.
Author notes
Experimentation of sorts, trying to write without adjectives
A contest entry
- Try this... or not by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 6, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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interesting thought, admirable write, I love adjectives, its all i do. I am not even clear on the thought of eliminating such a item. very nice story line. this time in your life seems to last a long time, but later, will seem so short.
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I really enjoyed this. I can picture your granny sitting in her rocker with the kids gathered round her feet and her telling them scary stories. Nicely done.
celtic queen
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"Stories that would give them dreams
and screams."
Love that & love the casual tone to this.
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It's more than 10 lines. lol. But cool beans on making it longer and STILL without adjectives. I figured it'd be too much for people to accomplish in only 10 lines to begin with! I love these kinds of story poems that capture a conversation or a moment. Very nice. Thanks for entering
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the Gift of Gab
ah Grannie. I remember that Nicole read Grannie's birthday poem so maybe this will have even more meaning now. I know what you mean about the unknown vs. people.
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nice!!! I think you've done a great job!!! I didn't detect any adjectives
an interesting thought that goes through this too!!
an enjoyable read!
Sailor Ptolema 
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