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The Last Fall

Abyss beneath pride's pinnacle

plummeting in hollowed glare,

darkness swallowing vanity's lesions,

crown cast into the waiting epiphany enigmas.

 

Dialogue of self barbs

a descent in recrimination thorns,

but heart quivers in its sickness of emptiness,

begs the refuge without deceit's sun,

at last allowed truth to have it victor.

 

No longer draped in pearly robe of perfection

ignoring the stains from obsession,

to willingly slip as shard of arrogance's vase

into the unknown, in quest of the flame of grace.

 

Resting, stripped of all illusions,

born anew in the midnight of one's delusions,

a seed instead of whitewashed viper

waiting a ladder towards deliverance

lowered by loving hands

with forgiveness as it rungs,

 

Because the diet, vainglorious

served a wretched famine in humility,

tasted with the expiration of boasting,

while grateful for purging within,

which only happens if the will takes

the last fall.

Author notes

"Low I kneel, with heart submission,

see, like ashes, my contrition;

help me in my last condition."

- from hymn 'Dies Irae' by Thomas of Celano

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  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    August 15, 2008
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    I can truly say this is stunning, and did so much justice to the quote. I didn't think anyone would choose it, so I'm really glad to have someone not only choose it but make it so extravagent. Your diction was delightful and the flow, perfect. As was the ending! Thank you very much for entering, and good luck
    Jeanette*~
  • chiefmac
    July 4, 2008

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    This has sounds and images familiar with one without honor and integrity. It can be certained of lies, the mouth is moving. I see this with disgust for trusting the words that escape over those lips. I see the terms forgiveness as rungs, but, I can't quiet reach my hand out far enough to bitten as the hand that feeds it. This says so much to accept that they have reached bottom with no place to go but up and embrace all scorn, and be convicted at every turn to prove their word is truthful in their last fall.


  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 4, 2008

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    Very nicely written. I enjoyed it a lot. It actually kept my attention and made me think. Lovely job, very nice flow as well, better than mine at points. I wish you luck in the contest.