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smile

as your breath
entangled in my hair,
a silence resonated
and it was then
we smiled

knowingly

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    I would almost leave off the 'knowingly' at the end -

    otherwise, I really like this. Its simple but the voice is strong.