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Nightmare

Emotions bottled up
Crimson tears frozen in blues
Lies floating beside every smile
Wings tied down

I’m tired of trying to survive
This nightmare

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    You did well, but I truly don't care for 'crimson tears' it reeks of cliche to me.

    Otherwise I do think the images are well placed.

  • kissofsun
    July 4, 2008

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    kudos

    I think you have written the way many many people feel. Life sucks us under at times. I call it "girl world" people are fake, seeming to be a friend, only to show their fangs at the least expected times. I think , for whatever reason, that it is these times that make us wise. Maybe so we can be there for our own daughters when the time comes for us to be. Or to be their for friends when they are taken down. I hope all is well for you. If not, I am one who understands how your feelings portraied within these lines.
    Great peice,
    Kos


  • aeolia
    July 4, 2008
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    Crimson is such a cliche word.

  • hardeepb
    July 4, 2008

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    Sometimes life feels like this...we go through everyday facing people's BS...but sometimes it's like...why? Why do we have to go through this nonsense? We shouldn't have to walk through a nightmare; it's beyond unfair. Lies beside every smile...sometimes it just works out like that. As usual...we tred through this nightmare. 8/10!