Insanity’s pleas of society’s greed
Pandora ’s Box unleashing the need
seeking fantasy’s treasured magical ride
hidden secrets entombed all have now died.
Symbolic dreams wilted into destruction
missing from tomorrow’s chaotic confusion.
Fall silently in pure love’s acolyte
fool’s gold illusion of mineral pyrite
echoing voice repeating the word
its secret of peace, message unheard.
Author notes
2. Treasure secrets of fool's gold delusions.
A contest entry
- PIF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
700 points, ended July 6, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is excellent. It should have won Gold. You really nailed the prompt. Very insightful and deep. You have really started writing again with guns blazing!!! Your talent blows me away.
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Nicely penned
so true is the delusions one has towards the material world of societies views and influence, putting gold up on the platter of a feast for the hungry, good write
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Great wording full of images and depth. I especially like,
'Insanity’s pleas of society’s greed
Pandora ’s Box unleashing the need
seeking fantasy’s treasured magical ride
hidden secrets entombed all have now died.'
and your last line is very powerful!
'its secret of peace, message unheard.'.....and so true, unfortunately.
Nice job!
Congrats on the HM
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Wowzers!!
Excellent take on the prompt and Love the rhyme also the line: Symbolic dreams wilted into destruction with the emphasis that grabbed me being the
word: Symbolic-
Love the Pandora's Box reference
Congratulations on Your HM!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Keep that quill dancing~Love this!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Whoa.
Creepy and intense I couldn't take my eyes off the words for fear I'd miss some of the action unfolding.
Awesome write hun!
Best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Excellent! A most thought provoking piece here and your last last is wonderful....sums the prompt up really well.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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a great take on the promt I loved the following lines but the last line was wonderful
seeking fantasy’s treasured magical ride hidden secrets entombed all have now died.echoing voice repeating the word its secret of peace, message unheard.good luck in the contest
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if it is yellow it must be gold. Truth is overcome by wishes of dreams of riches as fools march on into insanity.. Wonderful my lady. smile
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