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Freedom

She waits

impatiently,
rocks with anticipation -

I pull up my anchor
and wave to Old Joe

it’s a go

the Solene
breaks free from the dock

beauty unbound -
she sails.

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Prompt: 30 words

...writing to you all from the Solene, and oh, the ocean is so beautiful today.

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  • Lady Michaella
    January 15

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    wow. beautiful poem, again. i feel the wind in my hair as i read this. in such little words, an image is created in my mind. well done, this is excellent,
    x


  • Sesheta
    July 23, 2008

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    Such disjointed endings in your poems always work wonders for me, never forced...and now I long for the ocean!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    I wish I had a sailboat, heck I wish I have been on one.


  • Amera gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    I love it; it's been awhile since I've heard about Old Joe. I missed him.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sgt B
    July 6, 2008
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    Thanx Laney

    for sharing this one with us. I needed the solitude
    ~Ron~


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 5, 2008
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    Love the quietness of this.

    Thanks for it.


  • james119
    July 4, 2008
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    this is such a great scene... Thanks for the pleasure of reading it.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 4, 2008
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  • Peteskid gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    Smiles going up to the sky meeting smiles coming down...PK


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    I envy you. hehe

    Nicely writ.


  • paulcreates silver member
    July 4, 2008

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    Oh I get it...

    Solene is Portuguese for "solemn, ceremonious, formal, measured and stiff".
    Uh huh...*nodding*...I see. The boat is solemn, ceremonious, formal, measured and stiff....uh hm.

    .....




    • Dalaney gold member
      July 4, 2008
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      the Solene was named after my mother...

      Catch you later, gator.

      Love, Lane


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    Nice! I wish I could sail with you...*sigh*
    Best of luck in the contest dear friend.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    Properly home at last then!

    A life on the ocean wave
    The only place for a Lane
    When spirits are needing a save
    Get back out to sea again

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    a beautiful moment you picture here for the reader, love it..

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    what i like about this, and few will really see the back-meaning ... but it speaks from what i term "the absoulute beauty" of a woman ... what is great about this is that it can easily speak about the action, but speaks more deeply about the woman's mind and situation ... action being nothing but a backdrop ... hmmm, maybe i did teach you a thing, or two over the years ... f'ing brilliant (not in the real, but in the abstract mind)


  • sailor ptolema
    July 4, 2008

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    oh!!! love this, wish I could be doing that, instead of taking summer school *sigh*... a delightfully breezy poem.

    g'luck in the contest!!!

    S.P.


  • paulcreates silver member
    July 4, 2008
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    Ahoy!

    A beauty within beauty,
    the Mermaid sails...
    I see the sparkle, the sea,
    the blue sky, thee...



    Paul


  • Cannonsfire
    July 4, 2008

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    Oh wow what a wonderful thing to be doing on a glorious summer day Love, C

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