Walls of Emptiness

Looking up at the spider canopy
I feel myself sink into the ground
Pressure boils at the sides of my mind
I can't be bothered trying to fight

I let myself sleep for a while
But when I wake my dreams fade away
I'm still in this place
Dizzy with confusion

I sit inside and endure this life
While I watch everyone else live
Safe behind my walls of emptiness
Where I can scream as loud as I want to

Because no one will ever hear me

I trudge down this endless road

In filthy, sodden clothes

Swept aside by the bitter winds

I can't find the way back home

I curl up tight against myself

My head bobbing in a trance

I let madness overcome me

I can't remember much now

I sit inside and endure this life

While I watch everyone else live

Safe behind my walls of emptiness

Where I can scream as loud as I want to

Because no one will ever hear me

A contest entry

Rain by kales4. 450 points, ended July 21, 2008, 90 entries
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Shipwreck
July 14, 2008

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Was just browsing users as usual and realised we both entered same contest ! I really like how you took the prompt. Theres so much i can comment on i like all the imagery you used, but the main thing i liked was just the actual poem itself - its meaning. Its horrible waking up, realising that your in the same place - whats even worse is that you can only escape reality in your dreams. "I sit inside and endure this life While I watch everyone else live" is exactly how i feel at the moment . just everyone else seems to be living, being happy, just im left behind, the forgotten who feels nothing. And also the line " because no one will ever hear me" is very effective.

well doen on an excellent poem
kales4
July 12, 2008

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Thank you for entering my contest. I really like the point of your poem.. I ahve felt so many times helpless and like i was screaming to myself. Great write and good luck