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Struggles

Lured with all manner of pleasures within this earthly attire,

succubus dangles the key to here and now paradise.

Each deadly sin is craving satiation,

bouncing in an out of focus to secure hollow victory.

As anguish is torn with decisions frustration,

the devil sit on scales to help unbalance the mind.

Smirking and leering, awaiting final surrender,

whichever is victorious will announce his revenge.

 

With palpable hatred bound in jesters attire,

he'll make you dance to the bells to the fires of hell.

 

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Prompt - 3. Agony in the smiles of devil's delight.

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  • Tattboyspet silver member
    July 7

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    and just to think a few weeks ago you couldn't write darkness huh? hmpf! You are slowly becoming a proud member of the shadowed writers my friend and you are doing it with grace and style!
    Your reference to a succubus and the fact that it's a hollow victory along with the devil's help there (lovely description I might add!) has brought this entire thing together really well and it is meant to be read with a candle closeby while a storm is brewing outside ... WELL DONE - truly!!!!
    congrats on the bronze


  • Desire gold member
    July 6

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    Oh My~

    Powerful piece You have penned and Love the words:
    jesters attire also the rhyme woven throughout this verse Love Your take on the prompt~
    Excellent!!

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • penman gold member
    July 6
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.

  • dustookie2 silver member
    July 5

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    The title explains in a single word the prompt quote. You have selected words that enforce this agony as the lines flow from the page. A well constructed post. Good luck in the contest.