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The Day Spa Chapter 3

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A Serial Killers Wish List
Item # 3 The Cheerleaders
Please Read Authors Notes
Before Reading This Poem

(Intro to Characters Non-Rhyme)

Daemon Prince woke up in the arms
of his little sister Dina.

His demonic little princess
had been born again
in the eyes of Satan.

Baptized with shrieks of horror
in the blood of her tormentors.
She had blossomed and bloomed
into the perfect fem fatal.
His faithful sidekick
on this journey of revenge.

Number two and three
on his evil revenge list
had been planned together.
A two movement symphony
of poetry in motion.

Conductor and Conductress
in this lyrical blood bath
of which part three
would be her…
a-moral masterpiece.

Baton in hand
she led Satan’s orchestra
from a flaming podium
at the gates of Hell.

(The Story in Rhyme)

He woke her up and placed
a cup of coffee in her hand
switched on the morning news
the headlines were so grand.

Missing from the away game
seemingly vanished in the air.
The faculty looked so bereft
as cheerleaders cried in despair.

Two days since they went missing.
Authorities, still hadn’t any clues.
A dozen times, retracing their route
but always, the same sad news.

The bus was deep, in a dug out ditch
buried twelve feet down in dirt.
All tracks had been covered in gravel
the farmers drive and dirt road skirt.

The pigs hadn’t left, one single trace
except for the skulls, hung on the wall.
Daemon had to put up a second shelf
so he could, accommodate them all.

The day spa was closed for vacation
but the victims wouldn’t have a clue.
The invitations had gone out yesterday
to all the cheerleaders, feeling so blue.

Since you’re all regular customers
we know, that you suffer in pain.
So we’re giving you a day of beauty
to wash away, your sorrow like the rain.

Twelve invitations went out
and all twelve, quickly RSVP’ed.
By tomorrow they’d be in our hands
and for their lives, they would plead.

The owners and their employees
had just left on a one week cruise.
They had won in a fixed contest.
Daemon arranged, so they couldn’t loose.

They were all placed in a hot tub
with jet bubbles to gently soothe
served champagne, in laced crystal
then to the mud bath, so creamy smooth.

The hot tub had fully, done its job
opening, each and every pour.
Then Novocain affected laced water
entered each body like an open door.

The sedative laced, Pink Champagne
was swimming dreamy, in their head.
While the sulfuric acid, in the mud bath
went unnoticed, as they melted and bled.

They all had a righteous buzz
their behavior lacking any graces
as the demonic princess applied
flesh eating bacteria over their faces.

The Novocain began to wear off
as the bacteria, set in to do its job.
The acid was removing their skin
the facial, their beauty would rob.

One by one each Beauty Queen
began to writhe, in agonizing pain
as Daemon and Dina were laughing
the cheerleaders went insane.

The demonic brother and sister
removed their wigs and glasses.
With recognition, in their victums eyes
the two said, kiss our fucking asses.

You treated my sister like shit
you didn’t want her on your squad.
So you set her up for a gang-bang
through the quarterbacks hot bod!

You ruined any chance of her having
an emotional, mature healthy life.
So we stripped you, of all your beauty
and left you suffering, in pain and strife.

The pain you’re feeling now
will only get progressively worse.
Crying to God will not avail you
nor reciting Bible chapter and verse.

The football team is dead now
to confirm you darkest fears.
They’re all burning, down in Hell
and soon, you’ll join your peers.

Dina turned all the showers on
and set the water to run very cool
but this was just a sadistic façade
soon they’d learn the meaning of cruel.

If you apologize to my sister
into the showers you will go.
If you’re quick, you just might live
how deep the acids gone, I don’t know.

They all apologized so sincerely
clutching on to the chance for life
but when Dina, switched the water to hot
their skin fell off, as if filleted by a knife.

Desperately they ran to the sinks
washing the treatment off their face.
Flesh eating bacteria had gone to work
they turned away from a mirrored disgrace.

Loosing blood and lightheaded
all twelve had started to sway.
Still conscious as they collapsed
Dina still had a few things to say.

One year ago, little Dina Prince died
when her innocence was tragically lost
and for your part, arranging that night
now you’re all paying, the highest cost.

I have been re-born The Demonic Princess
you’ve all played a part, in who I am

this pain, will prepare you for the master
your souls, into Hell I now dam.

Daemon unwrapped, a package from Florida
then thousand, Fire Ants frozen inside
the two of them sprinkled them generously
over all twelve as they shrieked and cried.

They will only take a minute to thaw
and very hungry, they soon will be
a fine feast, we have prepared for them
the Demonic Princess shouted with glee.

The beauty you wasted in life
will not be taken with you in death.
Closed coffins, are in your futures

all your families, will be so bereft.

Hand in hand they turned their backs
on such a waste of human life.
They would go on removing evil doers
with the precision of a surgical knife.

Who’s next on the list dear Brother
we must start to prepare and plan.
The Asylum Orderlies dear Sister
we’ll get them as soon as we can.

Vanity always begs us to kill,

the selfish conceited ones, it seems
when you rob the lives of the innocent

and destroy all their hopes and dreams.

 

Let this be a final warning,

for those who live in the lie
beware the law of averages

in the end, you'll catch our eye!

Author notes

This list chronicals a brother and sister's birth as... "Serial Revenge Killers"

Each item on this list is an epic horror short story written in Straight Verse and or Rhyme. They are in order as the Demonic Siblings go from one group killing to the next. When this list is finished, each item in the list will become a chapter in the first "Poetic Horror Novel" ever written!

If you enjoyed reading "Chapter 3 The Day Spa" and would like to read
Chapter 1
I have placed the link to it here: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3600824
“Chapter 2 The Away Game” Is not available on AP Due to the fact that chapter two's victims die partially through bestiality and then are eaten by animals… I am not permitted to post on AP. It is an exquisitely evil poem and six and a half of the ten pages is unforced rhyme.
(Which is a feat unto itself that justifies reading it) and even contains some demented humor.
If you do read "Chapter 1 Camp Fire Story" and want to read Chapter 2
Message me and I'll cut and paste it to you in a message
Night Terrors


 


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  • Ami
    July 14

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    Wow this was really long and Dark loved it
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck
    -♥Amy♥


  • Emerald Rain
    June 27
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    I'm sory to say but this isn't what I'm looking for.

  • oh man allpoetry really sucks I want to read it! Send it to at donniawallace@yahoo.com if you don't mind please. I hope your book goes well...
    Okay down to business..... You know the drill I will break this up since its so long and comment as I read...

    Stanzas 1-10

    wow I want to read chapter 2 so very very badly!!!!!!! I love that you added another character sounds like a real vixion so far...

    Stanzas 11-20

    hmm I like your bitterly sinful duo they really know how to reak havic don't they lol deliously evil so far I really really love this!!

    Stanzas 21-30

    wow that is terrible that they did that to her I am glad they are getting what they deserve, but you are talking to the girl who stuck a cheerleaders head in a toilet lol

    Stanzas 31-conclusion

    One little issue with your devios fascade Ants once frozen die nearly instantly you can't unthaw them I am afraid. other than that awesome I love this satanic duo!!!

    I am short on points so I will have only applause for you as a reward.



  • hommie-t
    May 7

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    dude the skin falling off is awesome! that reminds me of "Repo: the genetic opera'. i haven't seen it but i heard that paris hilton's face falls off in it. i wanna see it just for that! thanks for the entry!


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    April 2
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    excellently done! keep it coming


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 27

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    This is a really food write. The imagery is darkly disturbing, just how I like them Superbly done! Thanks for entering and good luck

  • This is a remarkable write. I will defiantely stop by to read chapter one and as well would love to read chapter 2.
    Your poetic tale is similar in form to the tale I have started about my own serial killer. This absolutely ROCKS! I would add this to the finalist list however my 5 have been chosen, though I am sure that with 3 other judges yet to pick....this will make the list. Best of luck to you.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 20

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    A cereal killer is presumably a combine harvester ...

    Reading as a serial killer ...

    Good dark tale told in rhyme here, thanks for a dark and entertaining read and for the entry in our contest

    Jeff and Sue


  • BAMFNx3
    March 12

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    For lack of a more intelligent response, THIS KICKED ASS! I really enjoyed the story line. You're a wonderful writer. I enjoy reading dark and disturbing poetry. Excellent write my friend. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck to you!

    <3Kate

  • Eots
    February 5

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    Beautifully done. I like that you can understand, and probably have thought about doing these things to others. I very much enjoyed it. Good luck and thanks for your entry.

    ~Asa of the Wholly Shifts of Capitalized Energies

  • DecorusApparatus
    December 15, 2008

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    What a wonderfully dark poem!! When I began reading this the length or it seemed a little daunting but as soon as it began I was totally captured by this poem. I loved the fact that it rhymed right through without losing any of it's meaning or purpose. The story was definite throughout the poem and there were no unnecessary details added. The end tied everything together well and there was a fantastic moral ((I use the word looseley)) at the end.

    "The Novocain laced water
    entered each body like an open door.
    The sedative laced Champagne
    was swimming in their head.
    The sulfuric acid in the mud bath
    went unnoticed as they melted and bled.
    They all had a righteous buzz
    their behavior lacking any graces
    as the demonic princess applied
    flesh eating bacteria over their faces."

    This part of the poem was really great as it suddenly swiched alot more gory than I had anticipated.

    A fantastic write, thanks for entering it into my contest!!

  • misterfish
    November 26, 2008

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    OMG I LOVE THIS POEM!! The gore just fits so well. This is going to be so hard to judge...How wonderfully sadistic. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • November-Dani
    November 25, 2008
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    Gory!!!!!!!!!
    Looooooooove it.
    Dani.


  • November-Dani
    November 25, 2008
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    Haha yaaaaay. You've entered in my friends contest hence the "Dani is awesome". I loooooooove these stories. You messaged me the part two as well. Im just about to read this here part three. Loving the wish lists, cant wait for the next installment. Good luck in misterfish's contest!!!!!!!
    Once again, LOVE THESE POEMS.
    Dani.


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    November 13, 2008

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    WOW....

    I must say, as gruesomely sadistic as this piece is, it also made me feel absolutely horrible for the sister. I don't know what it's like to feel rejected, but i used to make friends with kids who had been bullied (i had a huge range in friends) and i used to see the toll it set on them. It's hard, it really is.

    The revenge was captured stunningly vivid in this piece. Thanks so much for your entry and thanks for putting hte line in your author's note


  • trekkergirl
    October 27, 2008

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    Thanks for sharing this poem with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest. It is a well written story/poem just not my type I like to read. Tho I am very sure since it has already one one trophy that it is an excellent write and people do like it.


  • Kinky Cuffs
    October 24, 2008

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    This is marvelous.I truly enjoyed reading this. Great detail.Fantastic!!Good description.Great flow.I truly liked this.


  • poeticcaresses
    October 2, 2008
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    There are a couple of spots that don't flow as well as others but over all very well written. As far as the story goes I have to say I appreciate this one much more than the first. I can see this series shaping up to be quite the horror tale! Good work, good story telling!

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4647343
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4644259


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    August 24, 2008

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    ooh this is very very good story, kept my attention all the way through i loved it, it was a grea\t sadistic story with a purpose and hidden moral,
    best of luck in my contest
    all my love
    kitty xxx

  • know one
    August 11, 2008
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    awesome but a little too long for my contest,thanks for entering.


  • DennisP1
    August 10, 2008
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    It was a write with an interesting twist on Satan. One I am currently using in a story..

    My only suggestion would be to cut out all that introduction. It is unnecessary since you tell the story of why it is happening later in the poem. And seeing is always better than telling.


  • PoetryDove
    August 4, 2008
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    This was long, but I did read it all.
    I'm impressed. It's a great story, in poetry form, of course. And it caught me off guard.
    Kudos, on that.

    It was pretty twisted. It was horrific.
    I loved it.
    Nice write.

    Thanks for entering.
    sarah ~
    p.s. sorry it took me forever to comment -_-


  • JustFallingApart
    July 9, 2008

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    wow. that was amazing! realy it was. it was a great write and almost the only entree that rymed! plus, it was actualy somewhat twisted, nice work and thanks for entering

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