The kids are all playing in the sunshine
Everyone's their own design.
It's such a bright and cheery day
What has gotten in your way?
Your friendship from the past
Trust me, it will always last!
So go out and enjoy your days
Bring in the rainbow, let go of the grays.
Someday, as you know, these days will end,
But you can always call me friend!
Don't take for granted beautiful times like these,
Just stop in time and let it freeze.
You have more friends, just look around!
Their bright personalities sure must astound.
You should appreciate knowing them
And even seeing them at all.
Don't be a broken angel
Whose wings break its fall.
A contest entry
- our little poetess...published in newspaper..piercing boldly through. by ears2hearyou.
1950 points, ended July 17, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a great poem with a wonderful rhyming flow, i like the story you tell behind it also. I like maybe on the last line you should replace "thats" with "whose wings break her fall" that would help pull that last line together even better, keep writing, ~Amy
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Oooh thank you for the great advice!
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This is fantastic! I am not sure why you say it is not done, it appears to be a sonnet and looks done to me. I love the message in this one! Great job!
Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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Good this is great and its not done yet hard to believe
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