runing runing runing end up in darkness
runing runing runing dont no why anymore
falling falling falling i cant run anymore
falling falling falling no tears not any more
i so fed up with crying
but whats the pont in trying
why do i kepp runing just to fall
well i get bake up and keep running
runing runing runing lost in the dark
runing runing runing dont no were in going
i lost in the darkest cornors of my mind
i dont like it
the thing it thinks scare me'
darkness is not fun'
loseing my mind is not fun
runing runing rining from my mind
runing runing runing from my mind
falling falling falling its grip is too ite
falling falling falling it is fun now oh god i scared
bored of losen ever game
no time to try and win
so i will let u
so bored of the same old shit
want something more
tell myself im happy
just o try and keep contorl
this is a song that i wrtet cos in pe we need to run but has a deeprr meaning
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Great i liked this alot my favorite part was when you said "i so fed up with crying
but whats the pont in trying
why do i kepp runing just to fall
well i get bake up and keep running
runing runing runing lost in the dark
runing runing runing dont no were in going" good job its very well written -
okay...I think it was...Decent. There were waaaay to many gramtical errors for my liking. I had to pause every now, and then, so I could really grasp whatyou were say in the midst of those errors. MY advice would be to, perhaps, edit it.
I really do think that it was a good try, and it most certainly could be better. I would suggest spell checking it when you are finished, most of the errors where elemetary, for instance "ite" I assume is "late" though, it isn't very close...
On the whole, I think that it was other wise a good attempt. -
Very Good
Very emotional and raw. Sad though that you let them win...sniffle...
but it is good that you see the darkness as not fun that is encouraging somehow...
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