Butterscotch clouds
the dawn left behind
Blackbirds singing in rivalry
why am I awake?
and then I remember
the look on your lips
I don't want to sleep any more
Author notes
30 words "5 o'clock in the morning"
cf http://allpoetry.com/poem/4393429
A contest entry
- 30 Words by Dalaney.
600 points, ended July 6, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Remembering the look on your lips... What a great image. Congrats on the bronze. You have become quite adept at freeverse. Well done. ~Pamela
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Well should of known youd be here. ANd the bronze
im impressed.
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I like the butterscotch clouds left by the dawn, the blackbird competition, the memory keeping you awake.
Congratulations on the bronze.
Marlene -
Jeff - your free verse is becoming more intimate, more you...this is splendid. love, lane
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Very nice ...
as usual, but I wonder about "look on your lips". What came to mind was a pair of lips posing in front of a mirror. A bit surreal, I guess.
Good luck in the contest.
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oh my! !!!!! this is so great!
i love this !! you do free verse very well
a divine creation for the prompt!!
~all my best in the contest!!!!!!!!
Sailor Ptolema~ 
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