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First Light

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Listen,
your breathing rhythmical,
a soft blues beat
for the symphony at dawn -

First light
enhancing the shadows

warming the night

You stir…


cradle my back

We sleep…
 

 

 

 

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Prompt...

'Five o'clock in the morning'

30 words.

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  • Dalaney gold member
    July 6, 2008

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    everything about this write (including the image) suggests peace and calm. Very well done. Love, Lane


  • Chrysalis
    July 5, 2008
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    I wish to give you twice the applause. This is so beautiful. Yes, I obviously love it that much!
    Best 30 words I've read ^^

    My favorite last parts:
    You stir…

    cradle my back

    We sleep…

    much luck in this contest.
    blessed be
    Blanche


  • sailor ptolema
    July 4, 2008
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    and I'm excited to see what you write