First sun
pure gift
rising
naked day.
Warming
magnificence
all loving
splendorous
promise.
Oh' Life
appearing
so large
in newness
on little
awe-struck
me
and birds
remarkably
like brothers
woken.
A contest entry
- 30 Words by Dalaney.
600 points, ended July 6, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
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you have a way of calming a stormy soul this morning...thank you. love, lane
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just what i needed to read today... perfection
Gilly.xx
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Hi Karim,
This is another fine piece from your pen..I can't believe this is only 30 words..
Again for some reason this poem reminded me of the hadith of Mohamed (Sala Allahu Alaihi Wa salam) about Al Fajr :
'"If people only knew what blessings are in the fajr and isha prayers, they would come to them, even if they had to crawl." (Bukhari and Muslim)
I try to wake up everyday so early for few min to do Salat El fajr..It is so true how much beauty is in that time of the day..It just seem so peaceful and life is so new as you said here:
'Oh' Life
appearing
so large
in newness
Again I feel so much peace and spirituality in this little 'large' piece..Fantastic job Karim. Best of luck in the contest..A winner Inshaalah!
Ruby
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Much thanks Ruby
for your eyes and also for bringing the hadith to me.
Sol
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This is how to start a day. Thank you.
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... and thank you Suzanne.
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Sol
Another new dawn worded splendidly by a fine poet. And we must marvell at that beauty given to us each and everyday. Write on dear poet. Your words are needed.
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Your kind words much appreciated Bob
Thank you so much.
Sol
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on little
awe-struck
me
and birds
remarkably
like brothers
woken.
Love it! Gorgeous, gorgeous words. And only 30! It felt like so much more because you said so much. I had to go back and count it of course.
How lucky for you that you often get to enjoy this time of day...
This is beautiful. Good luck in the contest.X
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I meant to say that the 'splendorous' word so kept you in my mind, I'm sure that you have used this before... and I just couldn't think of anything to replace it better! Such good taste you have X X
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Thank you...
and for the typo correction. I believe that this is a time I'd much like to share
With you X
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oh! this is cool!!
love the format, and the broken up structure, it works really well..
you've created a beautiful scene!!!
pure gift>>>>>a divine phrase
~ i wish you all my best for the contest!!!
Sailor Ptolema
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Much thanks!
I felt well prompted
Sol
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yes, i agree, a great poem to go with a great prompt
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