I HAVE A CRAVING I WANT A COOKIE!!!
Mmm oatmeal raisin, and chocolate chips,
peanut butter, and Oreos are all so sweet upon my lips
I crave there sweetness day and night.
The power they hold over me just isn't right.
My doctor says I must lose some weight.
But how can I give up my sweet cookies when they are all so great.
The tender sweetness you just can't beat.
And have you seen the diet crap that doctor wants me to eat?
Giving up my sweet friends is gonna make me cry.
And eating this other crap just makes me want to die.
So please if anyone is reading this can you please help me.
Just find anyway to sneak me even just one little COOKIE.
PLEASE SOMEONE SET ME FREE
I WILL GIVE YOU ANYTHING YOU ASK FOR A COOKIE!
So I think that doctor went way to far.
When he stole all my cookies from my cookie jar.
Author notes
laugh “Gummy bears will soon take over the world.”
A contest entry
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aww >.<
it was such a pure and innocent write... it sounded so cute and thanks so much for this great laugh i had reading this poem! i like the pic!!! COOKIE MONSTER RUUUUUULEEEES!!!
~beauty of silence
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Congrats on the numerous trophies. Looks like this strikes a chord in the hearts of many. It certainly does with me though I could substitute chips for cookies or maybe cheese. But I rarely turn down a cookie.
Enjoy your stick of celery! This was a fun write. Just a couple of typos though.
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ha! i loved it!
wow, this is good! it really relates to the word, "Creativity." Great job, dude/ dudette! I like the picture that goes with it. This is a hilarious poem!
i wish you all the best/ congradulate you for your contests!
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mmm oreos sounds good
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OMG I FREAKIN LOVE THIS!!!!!!!LOLOLOL!!!!i likes me that pics 2!!!
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this is lovely. made me want a cookie
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good job getting gold and I'm sure cookie monster agrees!
well thought out. the structure is great and the rhyme is solid. thank you for entering -
hahaha I lol'd at the part where you pleaded in all caps.
I've definitely felt like this, except with cake instead of cookies.
Some parts were awkward, didn't flow as well with the rest, but overall good write. :]
You sound like a mix between Angelica and the Cookie Monster, and by the way, that picture is hilarious.
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Lol, cute, sweet, and funny. Thanks for your entry. I don't like the use of the 4-letter c word, but I guess not everybody thinks that is a bad word... I do, but whatever. Thank you.
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aaww
I love this poemk and how sweet and innocent it is. The picture was so true and cute.
out the window go stupid diets. cookies are the way to go!!
The rhyme was amazing as i did not even realize it till the end.
congrats on the other trophys. well deserved. This really made me smile. good luck in this contest too!!
loveees,
transit~
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hehe thank you loads for making me laigh. I WANT A COOKIE TOO!!!!!!!!
except I dont really have any
this was a great piece, loved the innocence here. great piece, made me laugh and by the way congrats on all the lovely golds and silver and HM
best of lucks,
checkmate
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Adorable!
This is so cute! It's filled with creativity and originality!! Mmm..Now I want a cookie!!! Heheh! And I must agree that cookies are veeeeerrry tempting!
So I think that doctor went way to far.
When he stole all my cookies from my cookie jar.
Adorable! I'd be really upset if my doctor stole my cookies. I think I'd punch him out! Hahha! Just joking! Great job and good luck!!
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What an amusing write!! hehehe had me giggles as I'm sure it will Nat.
Come too think of it... I wonder why I haven't seen any cookies around lately... hmmm....
*goes off too ponder*
Thank you for entering!
Claire x
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i love the pic, nice write
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This was really cute. I loved the picture having been brought up with Sesame Street. I enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck
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LOVE THE PICTURE!!!
This could be a great poem if it was trimmed some, so that the line length was more even and the meter more consistent.
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Thanks for entering! I like your last two lines a lot, with the variance from the nursery rhyme.
I just noticed a few little problems:
~ Some of your lines were too long for the meter to be comfortable.
~ Some of your punctuation was off - periods in the middle of sentences, or in place of a question mark.
~ The rhyme is really forced in places, especially the line "The tender sweetness you just can't beat."
~ "To" in the second-to-last line should be "too".
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LMAO!!!!!
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Adorable, the picture made me go:
I found it humorous, both the picture and the poem.
There are some punctuational errors, some places are in need of them but you don't have any there.
you're a finalist
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This is neither a sonnet ..
nor a villanelle, nor a pantoum. I'm afraid it won't work. Enter one that will. -
hahahaha thats funny right there good luck in the contest
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thanks for the entry
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This is adoreable, i like the rhyme and the wonderful thoughts you have put into this poem, i dont like diet food either and i agree that the doctor went to far when he stole your cookies, congratulations on the previous gold you have won on this cute rhyme good luck in all the current contests, keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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Giggles... this is tooo funny great pic and a great write! I'd be pissy if someone stole all my cookies too!!!
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This was hilarious!
There are so many lines that made me laugh out loud, I won't deny it.
I've grown up being a fan of the cookie monster and you seem like you are one, so I just gotta be a fan of you too, then.
I think I can relate. I'm not fat (yet) There's only a short amount of time before my sweet little treaty friends get the best of me. Yeah, yeah, I know. I should eat something healthy. But..it's hard
The picture is heart tugging. I love it and it's another thing that made me laugh. I'm glad you put it up. The background is good, too. It's Rug Rats, right? I used to watch that show "back in the day" and they always wanted cookies, too ^_^
Try separating some lines into stanzas.
It makes it WAY easier on the eyes and gives it a better flow, that's what I've always thought.
Otherwise, you've got quite a write here.
I loved the thought behind it.
To be honest, I don't write many funny things. It's usually about love and stuff and it's so cliche, so I'm happy I got to read something that made me laugh.
Thanks a lot for entering my contest!
Sincerely,
dovey ~
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lol! I want a cookie now and dang it all, there isn't one in the house! This was good! ***Pam***
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i liked this i realy liked the ending but remember there are good substutes for cookies and some of them are realy good like the 100 cal packs i like this poem alot and think it is realy cute thank you for entering and good luck
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Gowd.. This kinda reminds me of my brother. hehehe very funny the way this was wrote i liked it alot. good job. My favorite part was when you said "And have you seen the diet crap that doctor wants me to eat?
Giving up my sweet friends is gonna make me cry.
And eating this other crap just makes me want to die" that was the funnyiest part. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
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Congratulations you ol cookie monster you! This was too funny.
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ok...i went straight to the authors notes and you didn't put the "Gummy bears will soon take over the world" and your option in there. please put it in before the end of the contest.
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Read the contest rules. You forgot to put something in your Author's notes. I'll leave my real comment later
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It's a funny poem. The rhyming is good and it flowed so nicely.
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Hahaha!
I love this one! As a sweet-aholic myself I can relate! Great rhyming and picture too.I just discovered you am glad I did.
Regards,
Degraw
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haha finally a semi clean poem! haha! and yes i love this pic.! and if you ever want to fight off a craving, drink a glass of water and wait 10mins. it usually does the trick!
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Great; I am smiling
and I love the picture.
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