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Who Took the Cookies From the Cookie Jar?

I HAVE A CRAVING I WANT A COOKIE!!!

Mmm oatmeal raisin, and chocolate chips,
peanut butter, and Oreos are all so sweet upon my lips
I crave there sweetness day and night.
The power they hold over me just isn't right.
My doctor says I must lose some weight.
But how can I give up my sweet cookies when they are all so great.
The tender sweetness you just can't beat.
And have you seen the diet crap that doctor wants me to eat?
Giving up my sweet friends is gonna make me cry.
And eating this other crap just makes me want to die.
So please if anyone is reading this can you please help me.
Just find anyway to sneak me even just one little COOKIE.
PLEASE SOMEONE SET ME FREE
I WILL GIVE YOU ANYTHING YOU ASK FOR A COOKIE!
So I think that doctor went way to far.
When he stole all my cookies from my cookie jar.

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laugh “Gummy bears will soon take over the world.”

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    July 30
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    LOL Very cute and well done. I think I want a cookie now myself


  • Heva Feva
    July 29

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    Very funny! Picture alone made me laugh, it fit so well with the poem.
    I loved reading this, it was incredibly funny!

    Here you go:

    Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
    -heva


  • Antebellum
    July 18

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    wow.....
    this is amazing lol.
    And I adore your background.
    So funny.

    thanks for taking the time to enter.


  • The cliche typo
    July 12
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    hahah nice

    sorry i would give you this cookie, but... docters orders! (shoves cookie in mouth)


  • cookie-monster
    July 10

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    wow. My name on here is "cookie-moster"..... and my birth certificate name is Angelica....

    I think I'm in love xD

    bahahahaha.

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 8

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    I LOVED THIS! it was hilarious! WOW! it was so cute, yet so humorous at the same itme. WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • happy kitty kat
    July 1
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    ummm

    yes interesting...haha...best of luck........

  • misterfish
    June 28
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    Hahahahahahahahahaha! So so so so so so so so so funny. Hahahahaha!


  • owlish
    May 30
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    I love this! Humorous and cute, and not too long. I absolutely adore the ending and title, because of this thing we did in fourth grade. "Who stole the cookies from the cookie jar?!?" Thanks for a laugh.
    Best of luck in the contest.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    March 28

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    Very cute. Smiling variety

    Just in case you overlooked it, I would advise you to check your spelling and word use.
    Thanks for entering. Warmly, CookieZeal


  • Nicada silver member
    February 10
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    This poem is very cute, and it gave me a good chuckle tonight. I think most of us can relate to this feeling of all the goodies being taken away from us. If only we could always eat whatever we wanted and stay healthy, wouldn't that be great? LOL Thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • gigglesalot
    February 9
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    aw i love the background. haha and the pic is funny. good poem.

  • poetyaknoit
    December 20, 2008

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    awesome twist on a childhood classic. You pulled it off so well, it all flows smoothly, with beautiful rhythm and rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. Keep on writing, ~TC


  • AutumnsFlame
    October 9, 2008

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    HAHAHAH.... Okay, so this kinda didn't flow so well in my opinion, but I didn't think it was supposed to. It was just supposed to have kind of a fun impact on the reader. Nice work! Thank you for entering my contest! (and staying in it)

  • Topnotchsy
    October 5, 2008

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    Fun piece. Congrats on all the trophies netted for this piece. I can definitely see why it has done so well in so many contests.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    August 24, 2008
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    aww >.<

    it was such a pure and innocent write... it sounded so cute and thanks so much for this great laugh i had reading this poem! i like the pic!!! COOKIE MONSTER RUUUUUULEEEES!!!

    ~beauty of silence

  • Judith Chandler
    August 17, 2008
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    Congrats on the numerous trophies. Looks like this strikes a chord in the hearts of many. It certainly does with me though I could substitute chips for cookies or maybe cheese. But I rarely turn down a cookie.

    Enjoy your stick of celery! This was a fun write. Just a couple of typos though.


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 15, 2008

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    ha! i loved it!

    wow, this is good! it really relates to the word, "Creativity." Great job, dude/ dudette! I like the picture that goes with it. This is a hilarious poem!
    i wish you all the best/ congradulate you for your contests!
    -pb fudge loves ya!


  • Foodahalic
    August 15, 2008
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    mmm oreos sounds good


    Thanks for entering


  • Whispering-Night
    August 15, 2008
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    OMG I FREAKIN LOVE THIS!!!!!!!LOLOLOL!!!!i likes me that pics 2!!!


  • edit my world.
    August 15, 2008
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    this is lovely. made me want a cookie
    thnx for entering

  • piccola silver member
    August 13, 2008

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    good job getting gold and I'm sure cookie monster agrees!
    well thought out. the structure is great and the rhyme is solid. thank you for entering


  • Duchess Dizufish
    August 12, 2008
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    hahaha I lol'd at the part where you pleaded in all caps.
    I've definitely felt like this, except with cake instead of cookies.
    Some parts were awkward, didn't flow as well with the rest, but overall good write. :]
    You sound like a mix between Angelica and the Cookie Monster, and by the way, that picture is hilarious.
    Thanks for entering!

  • owlish
    August 12, 2008

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    Lol, cute, sweet, and funny. Thanks for your entry. I don't like the use of the 4-letter c word, but I guess not everybody thinks that is a bad word... I do, but whatever. Thank you.


  • transit
    August 9, 2008
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    aaww

    I love this poemk and how sweet and innocent it is. The picture was so true and cute. out the window go stupid diets. cookies are the way to go!!

    The rhyme was amazing as i did not even realize it till the end. congrats on the other trophys. well deserved. This really made me smile. good luck in this contest too!!

    loveees,
    transit~


  • checkmate
    August 9, 2008
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    hehe thank you loads for making me laigh. I WANT A COOKIE TOO!!!!!!!!

    except I dont really have any

    this was a great piece, loved the innocence here. great piece, made me laugh and by the way congrats on all the lovely golds and silver and HM

    best of lucks,
    checkmate


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008
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    Adorable!

    This is so cute! It's filled with creativity and originality!! Mmm..Now I want a cookie!!! Heheh! And I must agree that cookies are veeeeerrry tempting!

    So I think that doctor went way to far.
    When he stole all my cookies from my cookie jar.

    Adorable! I'd be really upset if my doctor stole my cookies. I think I'd punch him out! Hahha! Just joking! Great job and good luck!!


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    What an amusing write!! hehehe had me giggles as I'm sure it will Nat.
    Come too think of it... I wonder why I haven't seen any cookies around lately... hmmm....

    *goes off too ponder*

    Thank you for entering!
    Claire x


  • JustFallingApart
    July 31, 2008
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    i love the pic, nice write


  • crazymomma
    July 26, 2008

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    This was really cute. I loved the picture having been brought up with Sesame Street. I enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 21, 2008

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    LOVE THE PICTURE!!!
    This could be a great poem if it was trimmed some, so that the line length was more even and the meter more consistent.


  • MessOfADreamer
    July 21, 2008

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    Thanks for entering! I like your last two lines a lot, with the variance from the nursery rhyme.
    I just noticed a few little problems:
    ~ Some of your lines were too long for the meter to be comfortable.
    ~ Some of your punctuation was off - periods in the middle of sentences, or in place of a question mark.
    ~ The rhyme is really forced in places, especially the line "The tender sweetness you just can't beat."
    ~ "To" in the second-to-last line should be "too".
    I think you have a good start here - make a few corrections, and this'll be adorable!


  • daviscth silver member
    July 20, 2008
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    LMAO!!!!!


  • whos my humblepie
    July 20, 2008
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    Adorable, the picture made me go:
    I found it humorous, both the picture and the poem.
    There are some punctuational errors, some places are in need of them but you don't have any there.

    you're a finalist

  • ecrivain01
    July 19, 2008
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    This is neither a sonnet ..

    nor a villanelle, nor a pantoum. I'm afraid it won't work. Enter one that will.


  • RebelDLine75
    July 16, 2008
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    hahahaha thats funny right there good luck in the contest


  • CowboyFan1
    July 12, 2008
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    thanks for the entry


  • peridotPixi
    July 10, 2008
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    This is adoreable, i like the rhyme and the wonderful thoughts you have put into this poem, i dont like diet food either and i agree that the doctor went to far when he stole your cookies, congratulations on the previous gold you have won on this cute rhyme good luck in all the current contests, keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy


  • techno-tard
    July 9, 2008

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    Giggles... this is tooo funny great pic and a great write! I'd be pissy if someone stole all my cookies too!!!


  • PoetryDove
    July 8, 2008
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    This was hilarious!
    There are so many lines that made me laugh out loud, I won't deny it.
    I've grown up being a fan of the cookie monster and you seem like you are one, so I just gotta be a fan of you too, then.

    I think I can relate. I'm not fat (yet) There's only a short amount of time before my sweet little treaty friends get the best of me. Yeah, yeah, I know. I should eat something healthy. But..it's hard

    The picture is heart tugging. I love it and it's another thing that made me laugh. I'm glad you put it up. The background is good, too. It's Rug Rats, right? I used to watch that show "back in the day" and they always wanted cookies, too ^_^

    Try separating some lines into stanzas.
    It makes it WAY easier on the eyes and gives it a better flow, that's what I've always thought.
    Otherwise, you've got quite a write here.
    I loved the thought behind it.

    To be honest, I don't write many funny things. It's usually about love and stuff and it's so cliche, so I'm happy I got to read something that made me laugh.
    Thanks a lot for entering my contest!

    Sincerely,
    dovey ~


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    lol! I want a cookie now and dang it all, there isn't one in the house! This was good! ***Pam***


  • XxemohatexX
    July 8, 2008

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    i liked this i realy liked the ending but remember there are good substutes for cookies and some of them are realy good like the 100 cal packs i like this poem alot and think it is realy cute thank you for entering and good luck


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 6, 2008

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    Gowd.. This kinda reminds me of my brother. hehehe very funny the way this was wrote i liked it alot. good job. My favorite part was when you said "And have you seen the diet crap that doctor wants me to eat?
    Giving up my sweet friends is gonna make me cry.
    And eating this other crap just makes me want to die" that was the funnyiest part. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • Rheea gold member
    July 5, 2008
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    Congratulations you ol cookie monster you! This was too funny.


  • Missa
    July 5, 2008

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    ok...i went straight to the authors notes and you didn't put the "Gummy bears will soon take over the world" and your option in there. please put it in before the end of the contest.

  • PoetryDove
    July 5, 2008

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    Read the contest rules. You forgot to put something in your Author's notes. I'll leave my real comment later


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    July 5, 2008
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    It's a funny poem. The rhyming is good and it flowed so nicely.
    Nice job and good luck!


  • DeGraw
    July 5, 2008

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    Hahaha!

    I love this one! As a sweet-aholic myself I can relate!  Great rhyming and picture too.I just discovered you am glad I did.
    Regards,
    Degraw


  • candymiser
    July 4, 2008

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    haha finally a semi clean poem! haha! and yes i love this pic.! and if you ever want to fight off a craving, drink a glass of water and wait 10mins. it usually does the trick!


  • Olivias Violin
    July 4, 2008
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    Great; I am smiling
    and I love the picture.

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