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He Killed Me

Day by day, minute by minute, second by second, my life goes by
Everday i look below and see me, or what seemes to be me
I go through the motions
I talk to everyone, but i am not really there
Just a vacant abonded shell
Not to let anyone, to know who i truly was

I see myself study francticly, stressing  over stupid things
But as i think about it, those were the meaningless thing in my life

I look at all the silly mistakes I Used to make

Everyday I see all my blunders... watching all the hurtful memories, of what used to be my life

I watch as i meet the guy, who i thought was perfect
he had a fake smile painted on his face,but back then i didn't see who he truly was
what true colors lay hidden behind the mask

I watch him as he charms his way into my life
I see our first date, our first kiss
I see him pick me up from my house
I smile and wave to my parents, not relizing this would be my final good-bye

I ask him where we are going his faces showing somber silence, as if here was coontemplating a difficult enigma

We drive for a while deep into the woods
"where are we?" I ask, still not seeing through the smoke
He looked at me with lustful eyes
he jumped on me
I struggled, i screamed as he forced me back
"I WANT TO GO HOME" hoping he would obey my pleas
"Your not going anywhere," he said as he looked at me with murderous eyes
He grabbed my arm as he stuck it with a needle
I watch as my body becomes limp
I cry out in pain, once last time before as i dove inyo a state of unconscioness
Im frozen, forced to watch the pain I went through, again and again

He picks my up and carries me to a abonded cabin
where i see him bind my arms to a bed
i see him as he penatrates my unconscioness body
my inside turns, as my legs give way

I watch as i slip out of my dormant state
I hear myself scream for life
"no! stop..."I whimper
"Shut up Bitch" he yeled as he latched on my neck, I fought back, for what seemed like a life time
I saw my body grow still, and the life drain out of me

I screamed out" I can't take this anymore, i can't watch this again"
"you must seek revenge, to put you soul to rest" a shadowed figure said, as if he were waiting for me

In My hand appears a dagger
My spirit drifts back to where it all happened
He was there in the corner pining over pictures of his victims
I went behind him and plunged the dagger into his back, he never knew what him
i saw the life drain from his eyes

i see his soul drift through the floor, where he would burn in hell forever

and now my soul is at rest
from my sweet, sweet revenge.....

Author notes

umm this is for a contest and it coulld be under :
9. Crimes and Consequences

10. Each To His Own Demise


this poem was inspired by true events....
This man was a true killer... he was titled "the green river killer"

A contest entry

does it give u chills?

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Comments

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  • Antebellum
    August 1

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    Just a vacant abonded shell
    Not to let anyone, to know who i truly was

    wow.
    amazing.
    I saw a movie about this on..lifetime? I think.

    thanks for entering.


  • peregrin
    August 1, 2008
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    Very dark and very well written,
    great addition to my contest!
    Best of luck!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Just a vacant abonded shell
    Not to let anyone, to know who i truly was
    Great line!
    I love the whole poem, piece by piece
    Its full of emotions
    Good luck to you
    Julie


  • daviscth silver member
    July 24, 2008

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    WOW!!! This piece really held my attention. I thought it had the ring of truth. Thanks for posting in the contest.


  • Silvos. silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    I can definitely see why this is one of your favorites, its just so wonderfully constructed into absolute art. It kind of gave me the chills though, in a poetically great way though. Gold trophy material here!

    Silvos.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 16, 2008
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    Wow, this makes me feel really sad and angry and all that at the same time. I'm sorry that this is a true story, so upsetting... I've heard of this killer, as I think I've heard of most notorious killers as I have a fascination in them, but I can't stand their actions.

  • Hovels 2
    July 14, 2008

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    This made me cry. I could picture it. I almost stopped reading it but I kept on. There is nothing more I can say.


  • spideracer gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Shockingly good

    I worked out how to make this write readable, your write is brilliant, I know about the man you wrote about, he killed a lot of girls and got the electric chair for his crimes, or it may have been a lethal injection, not sure which now. I loved how you had the girl in your story get her revenge. Will add you as favorite for I think your poems are deserving enough for me.


  • JustFallingApart
    July 9, 2008

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    wow, this is probably the only decent write I've read so far. it's like it came strait out of a horror movie, i hate to read though that this was baissed on a true story, thanks for entering i realy liked this


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    July 4, 2008

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    Wow.......

    this piece is chilling and the feel is very eery. You did a VERY AMAZING JOB re-enacting this event in poetry form and it came out well.
    I'd be proud!
    Thanks for your entry,
    kudos


  • Falling in Loveless
    July 4, 2008

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    love it

    i REALLy liked the beinning of this peice, it caught my attention well and got me to keep reading

    really nice job


  • Dark Prince Chaos
    July 4, 2008
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    sweet poem and it dose give me the chills sweet write would love to readmore

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