All I know is you know me better
than anyone else has ever tried.
You got me through everything i went through
you hugged me beautifully to put the pain aside.
You made my world brand new
gave me that fuzzy special feeling
that i never tried to hide...
Sometimes i wish that you'll wake
and want to imagine me...
i wish that when you didn't see me
you'd feel a twinge of regret...
i wish the smile that i gave you,
you'd never forget.
I wish that my kisses were something
that you never let go of...
i wish i was the one you held so high
above all the rest.
I wish that no matter how hard i didn't try
you'd tell me i looked my best...
All I know is you give me the feeling
that i can do anything...
you make feel as if i'm worth something...
You were like a breath of fresh air
never letting me forget that you were there.
Secretly showing me who you really were
with out a care...
Sometimes i wish that i was the last thing
on your mind before you went to sleep...
and sometimes i wish our secrets
were only ours to keep
I wish that my style was your favorite kinda style...
i wish that i could be wrapped in your arms
if just for awhile.
I wish that i was your favorite girl ...
i wish i was the one that
you'd wanna give the world...
But all i know is that...
your the nicest thing
that my eyes have ever seen...
that you were the first person to realize
that my favorite color was green...
that i really love the feelings you give me..
the things you've shown me...
Sometimes i wish that you'd see me for me...
and never try and change me to something
that i wasn't meant to be...
I wish that without me your heart
would break...I wish that without
me you'd spend your nights awake...
I wish that i was the only one
you would ever wanna see...
basically...
i wish that you'd love me...
7-4-08Dani♥
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Love that is lost by Megan Awesome.
550 points, ended July 7, 2008, 13 entries
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love it or hate it, i could care less sometimes! ^_^
Comments
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well i loved it
i think this poem was from your heart
[i love heart filled poetry lol]
great work doll i wish you the best in all the contest
keep it up,
vanna -
Its okay. I liked how you put it,and the feeling you gave. And the background it to to bright.... Good luck on the contest!
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I'm going to be really blunt about your entry...
I felt the emotion there, but the rhyming did not flow very evenly and the colors are quite distracting.
-Good Luck -
i like this poem...and i'm sure the person loves you...without your knowledge.
it was a awesome poem...and it made me really smile..the first stanza reminded me of my girlfriend.
amazing.
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Dani.Poo.Luffs.You
This is a really good poem. It is the thing that every woman dreams about. Congratulations on an awesome poem. Keep up the good work.
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Been there, my friend.
Currently living that hell.
You express it well. -
This was so pretty! Reading this I had a high school sweetheart in mind that I coulda/woulda/shoulda said these same words to
. It's such a sweet feeling, the one you describe.
1 mistake I noticed -
Line 38: "But all i know is that...your the nicest thing"
--your -> you're
--DAMSELx -
Thanks for entering this into my contest. I wish you much luck. Guys are great things to have around. They're great friends when you need a friend.
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It was really pretty... speechless
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I read this almost all the way through without blinking. one word to describe this write, only one.
Beautiful.
Thank you for entering my contest.
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Awesome. Its ahmazing. "I wish that my kisses were something
that you never let go of...
i wish i was the one you held so high
above all the rest.
I wish that no matter how hard i didn't try
you'd tell me i looked my best..." Great job its the best ever!! Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
Shelly -
I love this. It remindes me of how I feel about my ex. Because even though I'm with someone else and have been with him for a while ... I still want my ex to think about me. I still want him to love me. It's so confusing! Lol. But this is an amazing poem. It was actually quite difficult for me to read because I was wanting to cry from the memories it brought up. I had to read half yesterday and the rest today! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan -
Love is like walking in circles trying to find a culdesac.
There are so many people in the world lassie.
No one person is everything...even the ones you think are....
here's something...
If my heart could do my thinking,
and my head begin to feel,
then I'd look upon the world and you,
and know whats truly real.
Liked your poem lots gypsy.
LOWELL POE. -
I wonder if this is how God feels about us.
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awesome
i like this poem, i feel i know what its like to be in that position, its a good poem, could use a little more flow, but its your poem and i refuse to tell somone they did something wrong, cept maybe typos, because poetry is made to express ones emotion, or to reveal the inner being of that person, so a poem is the writers creation, and therefore perfect, as long as the writer feels it is good, if your still looking for a title id suggest something like My Wish...Your Love
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love it, you rocked it... great work..
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Wow, that's just beautiful! There's so much emotion in this this piece.... just wonderful!!!
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First of all this is a very emotional piece. Very well written!!!! But, the flow seems to be off a bit. Please take this as only my suggestion, but, I would rearrange the lines a little so that they just flowed off your tongue as you read. Maybe like this:
All I know is you know me better
than anyone else has ever tried.
You got me through everything i went through
you hugged me beautifully to put the pain aside.
You made my world brand new
gave me that fuzzy special feeling
that i never tried to hide...
Sometimes i wish that you'll wake
and want to imagine me...
i wish that when you didn't see me
you'd feel a twinge of regret...
i wish the smile that i gave you,
you'd never forget.
I wish that my kisses were something
that you never let go of...
i wish i was the one you held so high
above all the rest.
I wish that no matter how hard i didn't try
you'd tell me i looked my best...
All I know is you give me the feeling
that i can do anything...
you make feel as if i'm worth something...
You were like a breath of fresh air
never letting me forget that you were there.
Secretly showing me who you really were
with out a care...
Sometimes i wish that i was the last thing
on your mind before you went to sleep...
and sometimes i wish our secrets
were only ours to keep
I wish that my style was your favorite kinda style...
i wish that i could be wrapped in your arms
if just for awhile.
I wish that i was your favorite girl ...
i wish i was the one that
you'd wanna give the world...
But all i know is that...
your the nicest thing
that my eyes have ever seen...
that you were the first person to realize
that my favorite color was green...
that i really love the feelings you give me..
the things you've shown me...
Sometimes i wish that you'd see me for me...
and never try and change me to something
that i wasn't meant to be...
I wish that i was the only one
you would ever wanna see...
basically...
i wish that you'd love me...
Remember this is just my opinion!!!!
As for a title.....maybe.......My Wishes??????
Anyway good luck in the contest and keep up the good work!!!!
~DAWN~
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i absolutely love this peice, dear.
The Gray Area Of Love
that's what I would call this. It sounds like you're the one giving your all while the other is just sitting there like a mean sponge
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thats beautifull
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I wish I could analyze this poem and figure out how you were able to do what you did- I know the pink back ground really really is the perfect touch- but it is much more than that- there is something extremely special about this poem and I can't put my finger on it- it is not an ordinary poem- it is delicious almost like the taste of perpermint candy. I do not even know what to say about it- I just know that it tops as one of my all time favorites I have read on this site. I sure hope it wins a gold, because it sure deserves it.
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good plot, but painful to read. there seems to be no structure, although it's almost secretly inter laden throughout. work the structure a bit and it'll be great!
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I can tell that the person in this poem has been isolated and can feel for her, also, it's important to have someone who can make you feel worthy when the world is telling you you're not. I like that this poem so strongly captures that feeling.
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I love this.
This captures how I feel right now almost exactly
Thank you so much for sharing this.
Keep penning and good luck.
-OneLastThing--x
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