In the darkness of the night
The moon laughed mockingly
At my secrets bared at Your feet
You took the bones of my need
Infused Your current
Purifying with Your fire
No longer chaotic whining
No longer selfish meanderings
Now longing for service to You.
Existence of extremes,
From refinement
To beastly hunger
A creature of lust,
Slave to Your cravings
Feeding on Your delight
You ignited embers that burn in my heart
While Your passion extinguished my ego
The love and light of Your spirit has freed my soul
Author notes
"You need chaos in your soul to give birth to a dancing star"
A contest entry
- Write For Tomisb - He needs the words by Cannonsfire.
1000 points, ended July 14, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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the first three lines set the tone beautifully. The next three are a level of praise that is almost humbling, the last three speak to the energy as if it created a pole star and gave all that had no point
urpose. Very intense. Shiny bright.
The second verse you break into two parts. The first half speaks to the highs and lows of being so clearly visioned. The second half speaks to the gifts received. This is a excellent finish to the first verse.
Beautifully done.
Love, Tom B.
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Took this prompt and ran with it, Tom would be proud of you for this one, I know I am. Love, C
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Thank You so much for that comment...those words mean more to me than anything else You could have written.
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