Enchantress lies upon her dreaming bed
Viewing her kingdom to be,miles ahead
Curving waves,mysteries unfolds
She wonders what truth may hold
behind that misty sky
can she fly.
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A contest entry
- 10/30/30 Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
770 points, ended July 4, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is great, I really like it!
However, I think it might improve it if you were to change 'unfolds' to 'unfold'. It may help the flow and rhyme, too.
Great rhyme and flow though and I enjoy the fantastical, mystical feel of this.
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it is amazing how one can see the different reflections in the same mirror...i really enjoyed it...all the best...
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Hoş ses veren bir şiir.
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wow this is awsome!! the words fall in beautifully.
i love the rhyme that you had plotted here in this poem. well done
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thank you Miranda
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nice combination of words
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I like your take on the prompt, one that was all your own.. excellent job with the poem..
good luck
kat
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can she fly.................? now thats the question.... great take on prompt... thanks for sharing this and good luck in contest.....!
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Wow...Immortal is right it is amazing...I adore your take on the picture prompt....
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Thank you Shadows
I have to edit the background
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This is a unique take on the prompt... It's amazing how so many different artists can see such different things in the same picture. Well done, and good luck!
Laura x
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Thank you very much Immortal
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