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I never thought she'd be taken from me

I never thought that she'd be taken from me
The tiny life I held so close to my heart
The summer breeze blew over me that day when I had found out
That in my tummy I held a life so dear
Never thought she'd be taken from me

Walking through life hiding my secret close
When someone noticed the bump
They'd speak cruel mean words
"You're only thirteen...How could you?"
I held my head high
As I faced another blow to my heart
But yet I knew I had a life inside of me

That summer day was perfect no care in the world
Until that man I called a father began to drink
How could I have made him so mad?
How could I not have kept my mouth shut
I had to speak why god?
With every hit I made myself stronger
I knew I had to fight
I couldn't give in and I couldn't let him win

Laying on the ground I felt like the fool
But I knew it wasn't over not yet
Putting my hand over my 5 month belly
I held for the last time my baby
As he raised his foot I cried out
I woke the next day in the hospital
holding onto a tiny pink blanket
and the memories and scars of that night
I never thought she'd be taken from me

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this is a true story (dad= step-dad)

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  • starving-to-survive
    December 28, 2008

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    Omg i am in tears. THis is so sad. I am so sorry theis has happened to you. I wish i could take your pain away. I can relate to this in the sence that my ex partner kicked me in the stomach until i lost my baby.....I can really feel the pain and hurt you have been through....So many unanswered questions which you will never get answers for......well here is one answer.....There are sick bad, evil people out there and you have been unfortunate enough to come in contact with one....with waht seems as the devil. My heart really goes out to you. I love the structure of this poem too.....it really is a genious write. With so much emotion and intensity in the words, i love this....Thank you for entering my contest i am honoured and if you ever need to talk i am here to listen i can really relate to your pain


  • dewfall
    December 25, 2008

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    well expressed

    oh honey! if you look after yourself no matter what they do to you... you can have children... and tragedy like this doth make the heart grow stronger... thanks for your story


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 7, 2008
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    So very sad. I am so sorry.


  • DRUNKENxXxBABiiD0LL
    October 11, 2008
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    Wow dude, I feel sick. That is like the most fucked up thing I have ever read and if this really happened to you I am sooo sorry. I lost my first child when I was 16, I was only about 2 months along, so I sort of know how it feels. I have a son now and if I lost him I would die.


  • live-laugh-love
    September 22, 2008

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    whao...
    now that's just f-ed up...
    i do like the poem...
    but omg....
    do i know this person? cause if i do u might have a murrded on ur hands....
    lol i don't even know u...
    but this story is deff... abuse... at one of it's worsts...


  • foreverxnow
    August 31, 2008
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    i am so sorry that this happened to you. i would personally find that idiot[for lack of an appropriate word]you are forced to call your dad & kill him myself. this was, however, a beautiful piece. that's one thing he couldn't take from you.

    i hope you were able to get away from him & find happiness.

    nice write!


  • Darc Fragile Rose
    August 28, 2008
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    *hugs*

    from one mother to another, i know the feeling. i lost my daughter at 4 months along and i too was young i was 15. no mother should have to go through this especially when they are so young. you are a very strong person my dear. and i will always be here fi you want to talk
    great job and i'm so sorry


  • reckless abandon
    August 19, 2008

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    Oh wow. That's a completely terrible thing to have to have happen to you. I'm so sorry. Thank you so much for entering, you've put something so sad to words very well.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 2, 2008

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    OMG, I am so sorry, this is such a horrific experience to go through. I hope you have been able to get yourself removed from this household...

    ♥
    whisper


  • XHollowXEyesX
    July 31, 2008
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    wow this is such a touching and heartaching piece of poetry. Just the pure emotion and strength within this write is amazing,one thing...not saying that it make s it bad but you could improve it a little by adding a flow with punctuation, sometimes the lines mixed together when they were supposed to be seperate.
    A touching poem.
    Thanks for entering
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • maralisa silver member
    July 25, 2008

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    a very deep heart felt poem full of sadness and strong emotions all the way through I am sorry for your pain within your words good luck in the contest


  • ShaddowsDarkened
    July 21, 2008
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    oh my god you poor girl...i can't imagine the pain you must have gone through. and you were only 13?
    you are so brave this poem nearly made me cry. i don't know how you could get through that, and how you can speak of it. your writing is wonderful, and so sad.

    keep writing,
    holly x


  • sophia moonfairy
    July 21, 2008
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    ...I'm speechless this is so sad made me cry goodluck in the contest


  • aeolia
    July 21, 2008

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    I am sorry that this happened to you, and it amazes me how you've had the courage to write a poem about the experience and actually share it on a public forum. I could never have the guts to do that, and I enjoyed reading about your experience (not that I took pleasure in your pain; this intrigued me).

    As a poem, it could use some more poetic devices; writing tends to be more effective - poetically speaking - when you show us the situation instead of telling us, but kudos to you for getting this out. While it was an intriguing story, you cannot always rely on content alone.

    -hiraeth


  • Strawberry Wolf
    July 21, 2008
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    i... i speech less... that was amazing.... wonderful job and good luck!


  • Dark Otter
    July 18, 2008

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    It takes strenght

    to share this. I hope your writing begins the process of healing for you. Even, with my experience as a writer there is certain stories I wouldn't have the courage to write. Thank you for a highly personal piece.


  • Kathryn Bowden
    July 13, 2008

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    oops, one more thing. You might consider changing your background. I had to highlight it in order to read it. Normally that's an automatic DQ from me, but this piece breaks the rules with my blessing.

  • Kathryn Bowden
    July 13, 2008
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    First let me say your story breaks my heart. I hope you are in a better place and getting the help that you need. This is so full of raw emotion and yet manages to retain an innocence somehow. It really is an amazing piece. Good luck and God bless.
    Kathryn


  • Ephiphany
    July 9, 2008
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    Oh wow Amber

    First I want to commend you for sharing this with us. I am so sorry you had to endure this, but continue keeping your head up and know that All is Well

    Incredible footage here, and I must admit, I really enjoyed this story. Sad, but Real

    Much love and welcome to our group, hope you will enjoy it

    -ur group Leader
    Ephiphany

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