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No direction.

No longer within my grasp.


All; abandoned me when
they cursed my being to float
like debris for all eternity

No reason to fight,
                            I just keep drifting on by…

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Pic from photo bucket..option one ...30 words

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A contest entry

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 4

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    Aww so sad!! Sometimes I just keep on drifting by too!! Such a lonely desolate write... wonderful sis!


  • phantasyintrigue-x silver member
    July 4

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    LoL, I entered this as well, but I think your take is more groovy.

    "they cursed my being to float"
    I imagine floating forever would be a hindrance...LoL

    "like debris for all eternity"
    Great simile...the word 'debris' is sexy.

    That ending is sad and truly melancholy...like seriously, get out the violin!!


  • azlyn gold member
    July 4
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    So very creative!!! You brought this pic to life Sweety! Wonderful!!!

    Love You...
    Aunty Az


  • AngelWithDarkWings gold member
    July 4

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    this is an interesting take on the prompt.. an out of the box take, different one indeed.. I absolutely love this poem, excellent doesn't cover it either.. I love the last 2 lines so much..

    good luck

    kat


  • SuicidalLover gold member
    July 4

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    Oh hey there my you took a different approach to this! Thats kewlness! Wonderful word have been poured out of you inkwell. I wish you luck!

    Your ,
    ~Kystal Angel


  • Sailor Ptolema gold member
    July 4

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    oh oh oh!!!

    LOVE THIS CIN!!!!

    seriously


    its short, sweet (well not literally , and too the point!!

    they cursed my being to float
    like debris for all eternity>>>>>>>LOVE this....such venom just spits off the page!!!!

    all my best! you'll do well!!


  • Lil-Bit Crazy silver member
    July 4

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    wow you did awesome i realy like this take on the prompt...... i just keep drifting on by....... love it... thanks for sharig this and goood luck in contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Immortal Obscurity silver member
    July 4

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    This is gorgeous, sweetie... I don't know why I bother entering these things when you guys are in them! Good luck, and much ♥

    Laura x


    • CinfullyDelicious
      July 4
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      ...puhleasssse heheheh, you bother cause you rock in your own degree..I really thought yours has so much more then mine...lucky were not judging hey lol

  • ShadowsMidnightRose
    July 4

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    Very different take on the prompt....

    I love the direction you took, and it was well penned.

    Well done and good luck in the contest!
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