No longer within my grasp.
All; abandoned me when
they cursed my being to float
like debris for all eternity
No reason to fight,
I just keep drifting on by…
Author notes
Pic from photo bucket..option one ...30 words
In a list
A contest entry
- 10/30/30 Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
770 points, ended July 4, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Aww
so sad!! Sometimes I just keep on drifting by too!! Such a lonely desolate write... wonderful sis!
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hehe im drifting right now..no idea why but i am lol
thanx SiS
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LoL, I entered this as well, but I think your take is more groovy.
"they cursed my being to float"
I imagine floating forever would be a hindrance...LoL
"like debris for all eternity"
Great simile...the word 'debris' is sexy.
That ending is sad and truly melancholy...like seriously, get out the violin!!
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Thanks Darl
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So very creative!!! You brought this pic to life Sweety! Wonderful!!!
Love You...
Aunty Az
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Thanks my lovely Aunty
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this is an interesting take on the prompt.. an out of the box take, different one indeed.. I absolutely love this poem, excellent doesn't cover it either.. I love the last 2 lines so much..
good luck
kat
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i love going outside the box
, thanks for the challenge..or rather waking up my muse lol
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Oh hey there my
you took a different approach to this! Thats kewlness! Wonderful word have been poured out of you inkwell. I wish you luck!
Your
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~Kystal Angel
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oh oh oh!!!
LOVE THIS CIN!!!!
seriously
its short, sweet (well not literally
, and too the point!!
they cursed my being to float
like debris for all eternity>>>>>>>LOVE this....such venom just spits off the page!!!!
all my best! you'll do well!!
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wow you did awesome i realy like this take on the prompt...... i just keep drifting on by....... love it... thanks for sharig this and goood luck in contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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yep drifting.........
hehe
Thnks darl
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This is gorgeous, sweetie... I don't know why I bother entering these things when you guys are in them! Good luck, and much ♥
Laura x
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...puhleasssse heheheh, you bother cause you rock in your own degree..I really thought yours has so much more then mine...lucky were not judging hey lol
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Very different take on the prompt....
I love the direction you took, and it was well penned.
Well done and good luck in the contest!
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