Wasteland by Immortal Obscurity at All poetry

Destruction sears
desert's barren skin,
blemished beauty.

Civilization scattered,
thrown to Sahara's breath;

Famine feeding devastation,
August is insatiable.

strongholds fall to ruin,
as we wage war upon each other.

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A contest entry

10/30/30 Quickie by Sweet Impatience. 770 points, ended July 4, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think

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aidenspektor
July 9, 2008
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This poem has amazing imagery. It's simple but, for me, it's very powerful. I like it alot.
Chrysalis
July 7, 2008

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Congratsz with the trophie
such imagery... perfect word choice.
the barren skin of the Sahara falls to ruin ...
"as we wage war upon each other"
it sounded melancholic but I love it so much.
blessed be
Blanche
Freed by Mercy
July 4, 2008
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Strong, dark imagery here. Well written. Congratulations on winning gold!
xXDarkChildXx
July 4, 2008

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This poem was so beautiful and brilliantly written, I enkojoyed it till the end. Deffinitly deserved that gold trophy. You are very talented, I hope to read more from you.
Lost Vampyre Angel
July 4, 2008

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congrats on the trophie, this is so beautiful,
i really really do love this, such amazing imagery,
all my love, keep penning,
love your Lor lor,
kitty xxx
VoltaicHypnosis
July 4, 2008

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Wow, this is beautiful, and well deserved of the trophy! It is so melancholy, so true in the end, and such vivid heartfelt images... thankyou, well done ^.^
kiwigirljacks
July 4, 2008
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Congrats hun!
Sweet Impatience
July 4, 2008

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DAMN this is incredibly deep, dark and powerful.. I love this poem oh so much.. I love the first 3 lines and the last 2 lines.. you brought to life this picture with your words, you did it flawlessly..

good luck

kat
notorious
July 4, 2008

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Absolutely fantastic, and I mean it.
Love the verbs 'seared', 'scattered' and 'wage.

"desert's barren skin"
Wonderful.

That second stanza is the kind of poetry I aspire to write like...awesome.

The whole thing is powerful and well wrought-out. Nicely done, and good luck (but I don't expect you'll need it)
SuicidalLover
July 4, 2008

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Damn! My Gothic Lover has done it again! Word choice is great, really vivid. I see your 51th of your gold trophies here. I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
sailor ptolema
July 4, 2008

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oh my!!! how, foreboding!!!....love this!

"Sahara's breath">>>>>how torrid
love it, its a great way to describe the pic...

...just bitterness and hopelessness comes through ..

a great piece, you'll do very well

LOVE LOVE it!!

~all my best!!!

S.P.
kiwigirljacks
July 4, 2008

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Wow intense and dark and brilliantly written!! You always astound me with your creativity and word choices.. wickedly good write hun!
Lil-Bit Crazy
July 4, 2008

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wow this was interestingly good.... very nice take on prompt.. different then mine hehe.... but i like it... thanks for sharing this and good luck in contest!
MaMa-2-be-Cindy
July 4, 2008

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oh god..i have lost to this one lol...Awesome strong and deep.great writing

Hope you do well

Cind
ShadowsMidnightRose
July 4, 2008

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Beautiful! I love your take on the prompt....

My favorite part was the second stanza...it holds such an image in my mind.

Well done and good luck in the contest!