Within mislaid intentions
we melded,
knowing night
would never
shield indiscretions
Empty spaces now fill
with foolish tears
I foresaw
Author notes
Prompt: Picture & Quote, 20 words
'We knew it was wrong but we did it anyway and now he's gone'
Pic: Goodbyes to a nobody by ~Mama-Mia
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A contest entry
- Sensual Salvation PIF - Quickie 10 x 20 words by Cannonsfire.
1100 points, ended July 5, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Miss Laid, I know her! This is wonderful! You keep churning them out and I'll keep reading!
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You have a wonderful way of picking out an emotion and turning it around so your readers can see the other side. This is wonderful!
Love,
Amera♥
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wow great work on the prompt, you nailed it
i really loved it! congrats on the silver!
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Empty spaces now fill
with foolish tears
I foresaw
Wonderful lines..so well dwelled on the prompt....
Congrats on the silver dear!
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Powerfully written. I think you express it well! Interesting pattern in your word placement.
Congratulations on the Silver!
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Wow! hun! I realy like your first stanza "Within mislaid intentions we melded, knowing night would never shield indiscretions." You have sad so much with those lines hun! Congrats on the Silver!
♥
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Great take on the prompt. I honestly don't think it could be expessed any better, not unless someone wants to write a 100 line saga. Great work and good luck.
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amazing. <3
but sad.
good luck in the contest!
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Damn this is awesome, you always manage to make my mouth drop! Superbly done and in only 20 words! Wow, good luck but looks golden to me
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Good write
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Ah, those foolish tears foreseen...yes.
Wonderful take on the prompt! Well done.
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Mislaid intentions can lead to a lot of things.
Even good intentions can lead to craziness.
"knowing night would never shield indiscretions"
Wonderful.
"Empty spaces now fill"
Nice...truly sad. =[ You make me sad Jacks.
"I foresaw"
Ah, a bit of Cassandra-esque-ness here...love this kick-ass ending. It's intriguing.
Good luck (:
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dang girl..... you never cease to amaze me ..... love it... good luck in the contest...... thanks for sharing and ive missed you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Another of your brilliantly written writes. Fits the prompt perfectly. I wish you all the luck in the contest.
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Creative and so felt with brevity. Love, C
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