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Forever

It’s funny how the truth always seems to change
as we go through life, we seem to rearrange
the meaning of words once thought carved in stone
until one day we wake up and find we’re alone.

The day that I met you, no doubt was in my mind
that I loved you deeply.  I was blessed to find
a kindred spirit who made my heart soar…
Somehow I forgot this had happened all before.

Your touch reassured, your smile brightened each day.
We toasted each other and enjoyed love’s buffet.
We laughed at life’s troubles and dried each others tears.
We vowed out love would not fade with the years.

However….
our rush to love might have been a bit hasty.
Suddenly love’s buffet wasn’t so tasty.
Small habits that, at first, I thought so cute,
I now find irritating and I’m prepared to shoot
either you or myself just to set me free.
It’s come down to this:  it’s either you or me!

I’m glad we’re now apart… I’m sure we’ll still be friends.
We won’t call, we won’t talk… that’s how it always ends.
At least I’ve learned a lesson about how time can shrink.
I now understand “forever” can be shorter than you think!



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Prompt: A love’s misunderstanding
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  • Riftkin gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    Love that is misunderstood..
    no matter how little
    causes pain and sadness

    Thank you for taking this
    to your own place

    best of luck

    Riftkin


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    July 8, 2008

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    great ending

    'forever can be shorter than you think' is a complex thought, a paradox of words which adds an interesting twist at the end of a wwonderful poem.

    I guess we either tolerate those idiosyncracies which annoy us, or do as you have done and get rid of them.


  • jackreed3 gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    you got to be in love ...then losn love... then been driven in sane.. huh... great write... JackRee3


  • sailor ptolema
    July 7, 2008

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    I loved this. You are so full of wisdom. This was fabulous!!!!!!

    all my best in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    S. P. ~


  • toomysterious
    July 5, 2008

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    You have answered this prompt with a wonderful story, as always, and so true how love changes, and the meaning of words, too.


  • Maxboy gold member
    July 5, 2008

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    It sounds, to me, that you have described a loves misunderstanding very well. From beginning to end, sometimes a circle in your life, where the two come together. Sometimes, at the time, the saying hello and the saying good-bye are the best parts.
    Good Job

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