It all started as a girls night
We were determined to have some fun
What started out fun
Turned into the worst night of my life
We were heading home
At half past midnight
In the darkness
We never saw it coming
In a blink of an eye
Like some dare devil stunt
Was embedded in a tree
As you swerved off the road
In pure horror
I sat there in shock
I never even tried to stop you
From driving off the road
Drenched in pure shock
I never even saw the pool of blood
Covering our feet
That was pouring from your head
They rushed you to the hospital
But you never stood a chance
Now I must live everyday knowing
I could have saved you
Author notes
1. The death of someone close to you. Make me feel your pain, your sadness, your anger or confusion. Make me weep with you.
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wow
Very depressing, but also very emotional. I love this its beautifully written. Good luck in my contest and keep up the good work!!! -
Wow. I don't even know what to say, I felt your pain as I read the poem. I'm so sorry this had to happen.
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God I'm so sorry This made me cry and I barely ever cry. I couldn't even imagine something like this, the pain that you must have been through. My beliefs are that people only go when it's their time. I'm so sorry something like this happend to you but it no doubt made you a stronger person. My hopes and thoughts go out to you, thanks so much for posting
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Oh. This is a very sad poem that you have written in here. I hope that this wasn't based on something that actually happened to you because that's just too sad. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself.
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it's all true.
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wow...this was deep. you have written this in such a way, it's as if I can see it happening in my mind. Strong emotions and strong imagery - excellent piece sis
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I'm so sorry that this happened to your friend (or sibling, one or the other) as it is terrible. At a young age you never see the danger of drink driving, or driving too fast and it sometimes just ends in tragedy. My uncle Gregory had this happen kind of, well he was barely alive when taken to the hospital and because some of the other patients were a bit worse they focused on them but Greg had a condition that stopped his blood clotting and it was the death of him so... I can relate, though I was only 3 my Dad and he had an argument a few months before and hadn't talked since and it hurts Dad so much, only thing that really can get to him. Lol, sorry getting deep into that!
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sweet...
you couldnt have stoped her from swerying
she was in contal of the card not you
it isnt your fault
i love you -
Very Sad! I hope this is fiction, if not, I am very sorry. It's a shame we can't forget things we want to and remember those we want. A very vivid write, none the less.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww OMG is this true..? if so hun there was nothing you could have done.... nothing...... hugs.... thanks for shring this sad but beautiful write.... good luck in your contest....!
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Awww
this is so sad, Im sorry about what happened that night. Doesnt it eat at u sometimes and keep you up at night knowing that u could of done something. The same thing happens to me sometimes. Knowing I could have stopped the tragedy that happened to me. That memory is buried in u for the rest of your life, even tho, it truely never was ur fault.... great write
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I got chills!
Awesome pen! How terribly sad! I mourn with you for the loss of a friend, and the remorse that you feel!
Sadly yours,
Jennifer
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