Where is Joy?
Lost along the way.
She said she couldn’t stay.
Floated off, like a summer breeze.
Slowly slipping, so you wouldn’t notice she’s
Gone away.
Where is Joy?
In your distant past.
You couldn’t hold her fast.
Slowly parting, leaving you alone.
Wisely done, now you’re standing on your own,
Left aghast.
Where is Joy?
You hope every day
She’ll flitter back your way.
Softly call, it’s possible she’ll hear,
And she’ll return, to whisper in your ear,
Soon one day.
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Comments
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This is sorrowful. I see joy as a woman, someone lithe and beautiful and fleeting. Something that leaves an imprint forever and you know she'll never come back...or you don't expect her too. Great write, thanks for entering and good luck.
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Very nice!I agree with Seasonings=]
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That was wonderful! Very deep and passionate! Good luck!
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JUDGE:
Bravo! I like your entry a lot. I like the flow and the shape and some of the lines are quite good.
Where is Joy?
Lost along the way.
She said she couldn’t stay.
Softly call, it’s possible she’ll hear,
And she’ll return, to whisper in your ear,
Nice.
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Really nice piece, one that benefits from reading more than once. Love the rhyming and form.
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Nice rhyming, like the pattern. Hmm, i too wonder where joy went off to. Definitely a poem people can relate to, I know I can anyway. Great write, and best of luck to you. Thanks for entering.
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Nice rhyme scheme thanks for the entry
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great job,
i wish you best of luck in the contest
Love,
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Nice and deep. A good poem. Best of luck!
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Nice and deep. A good poem. Best of luck!
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This poem, leaves a peaceful thought.
Quite nice... Thanks for the wonderful poem~ -
this poem is simple but full of depth and I like that. Joy is gone but one day it will soon return; this is a very good poem and well written as well
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This is quite nice, actually. Thank you for the read.
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