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A Stir of Sails

Our love will continue, like the sea,

endless, flowing on currents of passions,

floating towards ecstasy's shore,

driven by their tides

as hearts becoming chartered sailboats

race to a paramour's paradise.

 

Come my darling

and be the mermaid of my sighs,

I shall be your Neptune,

together immersed in intimacy's depths,

entwined as rapture's octopus,

exquisitely drowning

in romance's Tsunami.

Author notes

60 words
Prompt choice:

2. Start a verse with: Our love will continue, like the sea...

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  • carole21
    July 17

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    nice

    evokes a nice sentiment . . liked "flowing on currents of passions" and "exquisitely drowning" . . congrats on the HM


  • Lady Editor
    July 17

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    Oh, my. Most beautiful take on the prompt chosen. Lovely word choice...really captivated me. The second verse was my favorite. Well done! Most excellent. Good luck in my contest and thanks for entering.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 4

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    wonderful poem full of sensaul images and the purity of passion great decritive poem I loved this so beautiful
    like the sea,endless, flowing on currents of passions,Come my darling and be the mermaid of my sighs,
    I shall be your Neptune,together immersed in intimacy's depths,entwined as rapture's octopus,exquisitely drowning
    in romance's Tsunami.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 3

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    excellent~

    I love the first verse that this contest open's up with
    Leaves the writer's a whole world of imagination to come up with and pen a verse or two to go with you
    You have did exceptional and far beyond that one worse and more.....
    So much love and so much imagery you have intertwined in this poem
    I do love the line too come be darling and be the mermaid of my sighs immersed in intimacy's depth's and drowing in
    romance's Tsunami
    Beautiful lil brother...
    This is definitely a gold winner in my book
    Best of luck in the contest...
    Trying to catch up on a couple of yours
    Love n hugs
    Your lil sis
    Susan~~~


  • sunshinegirl
    July 3

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    *sigh* Oh my! What a lucky young lady to have this written with her in mind This is soooooo romantic and wonderful!! Great job my brother!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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