i creep
and see
her torso
glistening
in the
air
A contest entry
- dark quickie by And Hyetal.
335 points, ended July 3, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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fantastic
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Mysterious.
Great write.
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curiouser and curiouser...
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succinct and wowing.
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whoa.
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i don't know i think the title and the piece itself are incredilby completementary. love it.
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I love the title and the poem as separate entities, but I'm not sure they really complement each other. Either way, very chilling and eerily-telling; Best of luck to you in the contest!
Laura x
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I think I like your title more
♥x.
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i think the world is spinning anti-clockwise against love
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perhaps.
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THis is very chilling and well written for such a short poem.
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the fast response you gave to this is almost hollering...
are you a stalker of the night? -
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That, and a stalker of my own quickie contests.
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a two week quickie contest!?
ANYWAYS
i will leave you to the night -
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haha, no, I'm not going to keep it open for two weeks. I just didn't change the date on it because I hope more people will enter so it will close itself.
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yeah well
thats a living breathing cliche
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