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Within

within this heart I dwell

subject to sadness and pain

thoughts of the bitter past

assault and rape my mind

no mercy given...none

alone I walk silent corridors

a ghost of who I once was

now just a shadow...

upon empty walls

for all I now know...

is nothing...

in comparison to what I shall know

the earthen bowl filled with water

scry and see...see and know...

my blessed Sisters of the past

guide me to your complete truth

let no one deceive me

infuse me with wisdom so fair

lead me to the river

commune with me there

under sweet star-light

tell me my path

reveal this to me

I shall indeed follow

Goddess...you see my heart

you alone know my pain

upon your breast I weep

like a lost and lonely child

gather what is left of me

make me strong...wise...kind

grant me visions of clarity

my pain must need be

or you would not allow it

Goddess...hold me close.

~Azlyn~

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  • Ravensdark
    July 4

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    Quite a journey of emotions you have penned here. I found it quite an interesting read. It was hard and soft at the same time.
    assault and rape my mind
    no mercy given...none
    These lines are harsh and bold. Grabs ones attention. Then the poem progresses to sight and knowledge which is still written wuite strongly. Eventually to soften into a plea for help...I enjoyed reading this, great write.

  • Bjarne gold member
    July 4

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    You are in charge of the spiral

    Given there is ample, nay, an abundance of reasons and explanations for this despair, yet, your craft, your art and your affect just don't add up to the result you present.  Yes, each has an abundance of pain, disappointments and downright, old fashion Blues...

    When these forces seem to overwhelm, we must relie upon the wisdom of others to find the light at the end of the tunnel. One basic premise is:

    While we cannot predict or intercept most of the "stuff" that life brings to our table, then we have to deal with the way we respond and interact with just plain old innovation and determination.

    I know you have it, I have seen it in action and you are a gifted artist and my very dear friend. I shall not reliquish my concern and neither will I backoff of irritating you out of "da funk"....

    Bjarne


    • azlyn gold member
      July 4
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      Dearest b...

      Ever so thoughtful and caring for me...thank you. You do cheer me on!


      Az

  • aboomer silver member
    July 3

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    Lovely! Great wording and emotion. I especially like,
    'alone I walk silent corridors
    a ghost of who I once was
    now just a shadow...
    upon empty walls'...excellent!!!


  • rc3 gold member
    July 3

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    goddess watches over you

    cease your tears now,
    i looked down and saw the sorrows of your life
    so dry your tears now.
    all things will soon change for you,
    as under my watchfully light your life is restored, renewed.

    blessed be

    light and my love
    Robert


    • azlyn gold member
      July 3
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      Thank You Robert...

      How blessed I am to have your care. Such a kind and loving soul you are to me.

      Blessed be...
      ~Azlyn~
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