I spied on my big brother yesterday
He was sitting on his bed and I was peeking in the door
But he didn’t see me
*Giggle*
He was looking through a book with pictures
I like looking at pictures too
I couldn’t tell what they were of though
Maybe I can look at it later
Then my brother put his hand in his pants
*Ewww*
And I was so surprised!
You know what he pulled out?
A BANANA!
I wonder if all boys keep bananas in their pants?
*Hmm*
It was really hard for me to be quiet
I had to put my hand over my mouth so I didn't laugh!
*Shh*
He started rubbing the banana while he looked at the pictures
My brother is so weird
He went faster and faster and then all of a sudden
Banana juice squirted everywhere!
*Whoa!*
I couldn’t hold in the laughing
I knew my brother would catch me so I ran away
I ran really really fast
I almost fell
*Hahahahaha*
I was a bad girl, spying on my brother
I thought he’d tell on me for sure, but he didn’t!
He’s so funny…that banana made me laugh!
*Heehee*
Author notes
The innocence of children...they don't know what they're seeing sometimes!
A contest entry
- For those of you in love with your pre-writes :) by thepoetsings.
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Wow, thanks for your entry, though I find it a little too raw for my taste...lol
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I looked at the title and thought to myself, "Surely not..." but sure enough, you went there. This was funny, and I thought you did a great job of writing the poem with a child-like voice. While I realize you were going for the feel of a small child, the asterisks, at least for me, seemed a bit over-done. I think the asides would have worked just as well without them.
Thanks for entering -
very funny
Thanks for making me laugh,
funny write,
Good luck,
isabella -
Lol... This is bananas.
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WOW
LOL...this is funny because I'm sure it's happened before! I love the emotions in the * * and it is true, children truly have no idea what's going on! GREAT POEM! One of the funniest poems I've ever read!
"Then my brother put his hand in his pants
*Ewww*
And I was so surprised!
You know what he pulled out?
A BANANA!"
LOL a banana! Keep on writing, this poem has to be gold in some contest somewhere! 9/10!
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