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Secretive Smile

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Stare at my eyes and you’ll see not one clue
of the feelings that make me a whole,
green eyes can't reveal all my secrets to you
they cannot uncover my soul.

My body is hidden behind veils of black,
my senses forever fly free,
my spirit confined as I look through this crack.
What is it that you really see?

The envy I feel that lies deep in my heart
when I capture the world in my eyes,
pools of reflection, though green from the start
mask all of the pain and the sighs.

Just wanting true love for the person within
who is screaming aloud to get out,
craving the touch of a mans warming skin,
and feeling alive with no doubt.

My lips you can’t see, my eyes give a smile,
the message I hope you can read,
a woman I am with a feminine wile
and freedom is all that I need.

 

 

 

 


 

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Prompt. The Eyes Have It
What is she thinking?

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  • breedluv gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    Awesome write. Beautiful imagery, wonderful rhythm, impeccable rhyme. I think you captured the image very well. Bravo!


  • Lily of the Valley
    July 4, 2008

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    The eyes can give so much away or hold so much back but the lines you have written here must surely express the thoughts hidden behind many. You have a way of taking a promt and turning it into something very worth while reading that also bears some reality to situations in life. Good luck in the contest


  • moonbumps silver member
    July 4, 2008

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    Perfect take on the prompt Sunshine-faultless as ever!
    xxx Hilly


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 4, 2008
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    This is a great take on the prompt Nice job.

  • Bad Bill
    July 4, 2008
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    Eye, eye, wot's all this then? Lovely poem, Sue.

    Bill


  • Rheea gold member
    July 3, 2008
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    ah the men think they know.. but you said it all here!
    perfect.


  • arafura gold member
    July 3, 2008
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    Very good! Yes it's all in the eyes!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    There is no disguise
    If you look in the eyes
    The secrets are there
    If you only take care
    She'll welcome you in
    If you want to begin
    You must just realise
    It's the eyes!

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