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Ravenous Revenge

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For all the lies you tainted me,
Intoxicated me till I did agree,
Made me Admit to being your whore,
Cursing at me just like the night before,
Beating me till I Screamed out...

"I'm nothing but a whore, I'm Useless, Punish me for my existence"

Even Though I'd smile inside,
plotting plans for ever tear I cried,
planning out my malign Vindictive,
laughing because your every move Is predictive,
On the outside acting Tender...Feeble...Frail...

"You hurt her so you shall pay, In blood and Flesh"

That one night you were at work,
gathering my equipment with a smirk,
A Scalpel, Some ropes, A whip or two,
Grinning at how later ill be laughing at you,

"that's when you walked in looking as vile as ever"


I took your hand looking at you with Innocent Eyes,
Whispering to you "i have a surprise"
Forcing you into the chair set out behind your legs,
Blindfolding you, looking forward to your helpless begs,
as you begin to throw curses at me..surprise...surprise

"what is she doing? where is her fear... he thought to himself"

It started with a cut deep and oozing,
grinning because I find this amusing,
mutilating your arms, legs, watching your blood drip,
when your done, its my whip I now equip,
your screaming is echoing in this old shack...

"It's too late, too bad you choose to live by the sea away from anybody else"


one lash here another there, make you pay your debt's,
made you scream in pain,Ii hold no regrets,
till your back is red and raw, gleaming with your essence,
make you pass out in pain till your screams evanescence
when you awake...

"and she's laughing at him now for he's so weak"


finally cut your throat, kill you at last,
clean up this blood stained blasted shack pretty fast,
Making sure I ripped out your heart,
and use it like a piece of filthy art,
Find that dress I said I'd wear to our wedding,
clean the floor where you have been treading
go outside and taste fresh air by the ocean,
clean my skin of your deadly potion,

Look at me now, clean as ever,
smiling, free, I'm feeling clever,
your heart is on this rusted chain,
your heart Is crumbling away,
while your body will lie there forever In decay,

"while your soul shall rest in hell"

Author notes

i know its long,
i got alittle carrid away but i am proud of this,
i was inspired and i made the bg

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  • i love it. i'd like to do that to a couple of ppl.
    extremely twisted...i like.


  • Iloveugh
    July 25

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    Theres lots of emotion in this poem. Its a very well written write and i loved it alot.
    good job.
    ..<3..
    Shelly

  • Vidasmoke
    July 14

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    wow, i dont think i have read a poem like this
    so twisted, makes me smile ha
    good luck and good job


  • FaithNoMore
    July 14

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    hahaha oh i love this, the rhyme scheme is great as is the flow, the urge to kill just screams out in this poem. But we all know Kitty is a gentle person don't we


  • Jfd
    July 10

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    I really love how you started this off....fierce, powerful and so dark, immediately the reader was sucked into your emotions....I'm a little confused by the green italicized text, the main stanzas are from the narrators perspective and at first I thought the green lines represented internal thoughts from the narrator, but then it switches to general statements and also thoughts from the male character, I'm not sure if this adds anything to the poem or hinders the flow....there were some spelling and grammatical errors that I noticed, but that was minuscule.....over all I really enjoyed the intensity you brought to this poem.....thank you for taking the time to enter!
  • The length is perfect, you carried it beautifully throughout. I must say I enjoyed the colour change for the sentences in quotations.

    "You hurt her so you shall pay, In blood and Flesh"

    There are so many people I wish I could scream this at, even at this very moment. You're a wonderful poetess, and thank you for being so open about your vampyric status, you speak for those of us who are afraid to do so.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 4

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    a very grusome and powerful poem on the wonderful darkness I loved the following lines as I can relate to the first two and your ending is so powerful
    Cursing at me just like the night before,Beating me till I Screamed out...Look at me now, clean as ever,
    smiling, free, I'm feeling clever,your heart is on this rusted chain,your heart is crumbling away,while your body will lie there forever in decay,"while your soul shall rest in hell"good luck in the contestmaralisa

  • Grusom I love it you should win that contest hell i never won a contest but you have such great knowledge into the dark side of poetry.


  • Cindy gold member
    July 3
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    Oh wow, this is grusom and dark to the bone. Nice

  • Zarokk666
    July 3

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    oh this is dark, this is evil, this is my kind of poetry
    it actually gave me chills, I love it
    keep penning dear and
    See you soon...

    Zarok

  • lupis
    July 3
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    hey its pretty cool i like it
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