When you first told me,
You wanted something only i could give,
I felt special and obliged.
Little did i know what i was to find.
First you took my trust,
And manhandled it with disdain.
Then you took away the faith i had,
And left only a core of pain.
I found myself shaken to the roots,
And realised the belief was gone.
Your name on my lips,
In the crowd, i was alone.
The pendulum had never swayed so slow,
Nothing i did could stem the flow.
And as eventualities went by,
Obliviousness was achieved with every try.
Now you are back,
When nothing is left.
What else you want from me?
"i want the hope", was the reply.
Hope has kept me alive,
It will go with me till I die,
And no, you can't take it away.
Even though you be the mighty 'TIME'.
Have you ever felt like struggling with the time??
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well done...great choice of words! full of emotions and hope is the key !
juliet
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forgot this
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really good. its full of emotion, and its kinda sad. i love the way it changes mood thoughout the poem
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this is a great poem
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awww wow this is awesome. it is full of emotion. nice write. nothing wrong that i see. wonderful write. i added u as a fav too.
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aww very nice. One thing I'd add, maybe you could add more punctuation in the first half of the poem to help the flow a bit better- only a suggestion.
great peice tho
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u are right
ya i was thinking too, i didn't care much when i added the piece, but now i think puctuation would be nice to make the flow.
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