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Good Bye Mommy And Daddy

A little girl,
Sits on the side,
Watching cars go by.
She thinks of her,
Family.
The one that abandoned her,
Left her here to die.
"I'll kill myself,
Before the world does first"
She smiles as these words,
Are said.
She finds a knife.
"What is this doing,
Here?"
She puts it to her kneck.
"Good bye mommy,
Good bye daddy,
I hate you both."
She slits her arms,
Then her neck,
She falls to the ground.
Her parents come by,
Find her dead.
They wish they didn't,
Leave her there to die.

Author notes

I don't know, but I think killing off a little girl is pretty much... depressing at points :/ Enjoy.

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  • penman gold member
    July 6, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so dark. Best of luck in the contest.


  • LullabyxxDreamer
    July 4, 2008
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    amazing
    just absolutely amazing
    great write
    good luck


  • brokenxxangel
    July 3, 2008

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    I really like the line "I'll kill myself, before the world does first." The ending surprised me; I thought she was going to walk out onto the road and get run over, but instead, she slits her wrists and neck.


  • xrain dancerx
    July 3, 2008

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    i think overall it was good. but, just in my oppinon, i would, give a little more dramatic ending. instead of with the knife maybe standing in front of a car/semi? sorry alittle harsh, but just my thoughts. great job!!