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Take Back The Heart

A girl comes by,
To the coffin closed.
Breaks it open.
It's her deceased love.
All white and cold.
"Oh, my love"
She says above.
She rips open his chest,
And takes back the heart,
"You don't need this,
Anymore"
She closes the coffin,
And walks away.
The heart in her hand.
She took back her heart,
The one he broke and stole.

Author notes

This is something I thought of while looking at the picture, :/ I hope you enjoy the poem.

Credits: Pic from google images

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  • B.m.w
    July 9, 2008
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    Amazing! Deep but in a good way...I hope you understand what I mean! ^^"


  • Silly Rabbit.
    July 4, 2008

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    -shudders- this is a fair creepy piece. i could vividly see a jaded woman doing this to someone. well penned thanks much for sharing and keep up the good work


  • daviscth silver member
    July 3, 2008
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    I like this. It has a wonderful suspense to it. Congrats on your bronze.


  • Wolf Mancini
    July 3, 2008

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    Creepy

    Reminds me of Poe right after a fix.
    I truly enjoy this sort of sick shit!
    well done dear one

    wolf


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 3, 2008

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    I like this a lot. Great tension in this and the darkness touched me. Good luck in the contest. Superb imagery.

    {Could you credit the image to google images? Thank you}.

    Dark
    Wishes
    Wayne Leon

  • amy86
    July 3, 2008

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    interesting picture, also interesting last line. thought it was gonna be a girl wos loved and lost but a twist where he broke her heart is very good well done,

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